Essay topics: TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task
Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when they try to fly through glass windows There are, however, several solutions that responsible businesses can use to prevent injuries to birds.
One-Way Glass
One solution is to replace the regular, clear glass with one-way glass that is transparent in only one direction. The occupants of the building can see out, but birds and others cannot see in. If birds cannot see through a window, they will understand that the glass forms a solid barrier and will not try to fly through it.
Colorful Designs
A second solution is to paint colorful lines or other designs on regular window glass. For example, a window could have a design of thin stripes painted over the glass. People would still be able to see through the openings in the design where there is no paint, while birds would see the stripes and thus avoid trying to fly through the glass Architects can be encouraged to include colorful painted patterns on glass as part of the general design of buildings.
Magnetic Field
The third solution is to create an artificial magnetic held to guide birds away from buildings. Humans use an instrument called a magnetic compass to determine directions-either north, south, east, or west. Bird research has shown that birds have a natural ability to sense Earth’s magnetic fields; this ability works just like a compass, and it helps birds navigate in the right direction when they fly. A building in a bird flight path can be equipped with powerful electromagnets that emit magnetic signals that steer birds in a direction away from the building.
The reading passage proposes three solutions to prevent birds from flying through glass windows on buildings and getting injured. However, the lecturer indicates that the three proposals will not work.
First of all, the speaker states that the one-way glass is going to be as bad as regular glass for birds. He further explains that one-way glass will reflect light like a mirror. As a result, birds could see reflections of the sky or a tree on the glass and think it's real then try to fly right through it.
Second, the professor also casts doubt on the idea of having colorful designs with some unpainted areas on the regular glass. He argues that birds might perceive the clear areas as open holes and try to pass through them as well.
Lastly, the lecturer holds that birds use their magnetic sense only when traveling long distance such as from one country to another. On the other hand, They do not depend on the earth's magnetic field while flying a short distance. They most likely use their eyes and brightness of light as guidance. Consequently, a source of magnetic signals on the structure will not steer birds away from the building.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s and try to pass through them as well. Lastly, the lecturer holds that birds us...
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Line 7, column 407, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...not steer birds away from the building.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, however, lastly, second, so, then, well, while, such as, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 10.4613686534 19% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 30.3222958057 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 957.0 1373.03311258 70% => OK
No of words: 200.0 270.72406181 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.785 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76060309309 4.04702891845 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26260358879 2.5805825403 88% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 145.348785872 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.62 0.540411800872 115% => OK
syllable_count: 269.1 419.366225166 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.55342163355 84% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.133818399 49.2860985944 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.0 110.228320801 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1818181818 21.698381199 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6363636364 7.06452816374 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.512666779705 0.272083759551 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161640526309 0.0996497079465 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775092342979 0.0662205650399 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260436053564 0.162205337803 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052934393332 0.0443174109184 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.3589403974 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 53.8541721854 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 11.0289183223 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.2367328918 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.42419426049 90% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 63.6247240618 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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