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The speaker argues the concept presented in the passage. The idea of that concept lies in stimulating people’s willing to work with rewards. It is asserted that properly structured reward system may increase employee’s aspiration to achieve better results.
The speaker, however, tends to cast a doubt upon the performance of the idea. He provides several arguments which undermine the theory of reward system. Among them, for example, people’s thoughts regarding such systems, he claims that people don’t like that approach and just want to be given a respect instead.
Furthermore, the speaker mentions studies, which on the contrary, indicate such methods as counterproductive. Such effect, according to the orator, simply caused by employee’s attitude toward the system. Some people see it as a leverage, by which employers try to manipulate them. Moreover, the similarity of the reward system with a punishment system is quite obvious. Indeed, as the speaker states - the more desirable the reward, the more disappointment of failing to get it.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, may, moreover, regarding, so, for example, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 10.4613686534 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 7.30242825607 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 22.412803532 49% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 916.0 1373.03311258 67% => OK
No of words: 164.0 270.72406181 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58536585366 5.08290768461 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57858190836 4.04702891845 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17685615974 2.5805825403 123% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 145.348785872 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.658536585366 0.540411800872 122% => OK
syllable_count: 271.8 419.366225166 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 14.0 21.2450331126 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.6780360566 49.2860985944 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.2727272727 110.228320801 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9090909091 21.698381199 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.27272727273 7.06452816374 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.3589403974 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 53.8541721854 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.55 12.2367328918 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.01 8.42419426049 119% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 63.6247240618 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.498013245 72% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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