integrated essay TPO13
The reading illustrates that because of the private collectors present a menace for the fossils and development for the scientists and the general public . The professor contradicts this claim by theses strong evidence.
Firstly, in the reading, it is said that since the large number of the fossils will be bought by the private collectors, it is hard consition for the people to see the fossil. In contrast, the professor claims that with the most fossils that will be founded using this trade, more people and private schools could buy it and therefore, there are many fossils to access to visit.
Secondly, even though the reading claims that in this case, the scientists lose the most important resources to study about the fossils, those important fossils will be evaluted before to be purchased using the commercial market. Therefore, it is not a menace for the future of fossils study,
Thirdly, although the passage says that the commercial fossil collectors often destroy valuable scientific evidence associated with the fossils they unearth. However, the professor belives that without the private collectors, very fossils will be undiscovered. Therefore, the private collectors lead to increase the number of the fossils available for the people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 141, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
... development for the scientists and the general public . The professor contradicts this claim ...
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Line 1, column 155, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...or the scientists and the general public . The professor contradicts this claim by...
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Line 3, column 293, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... menace for the future of fossils study, Thirdly, although the passage says that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 30.3222958057 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1063.0 1373.03311258 77% => OK
No of words: 200.0 270.72406181 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.315 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76060309309 4.04702891845 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67804988552 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 145.348785872 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 320.4 419.366225166 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.7099428175 49.2860985944 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.875 110.228320801 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 21.698381199 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.125 7.06452816374 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.524120182113 0.272083759551 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.249002499359 0.0996497079465 250% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113849374662 0.0662205650399 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.341620283691 0.162205337803 211% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0532065365692 0.0443174109184 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.3589403974 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 53.8541721854 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.0289183223 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.2367328918 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 63.6247240618 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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