Integrated writing TPO40

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Integrated writing TPO40

Submitted by meriazol on Wed, 12/27/2017 - 12:09

In the reading passage, the author discusses that due to the conditions on Venus it is impossible surviving of a human as well as Mars and the Moon for three reasons. While the lecturer claims that the passage reading state is not convincing and disputes those ideas presented in the passage with several proofs.
Firstly, according to the reading passage, it is suggested that the amount of pressure of the Venus surface is 90 times greater than the Earth's surface. Therefore all spacecraft will be crushed in this situation. However, the speaker argues in the lecture that it is not true. He claims that the pressure could be lower than usual believes because of flooding atmosphere around it and flowing wind decline this high pressure and cannot be dangerous for spacecraft.
In addition, the statement in the reading material indicates that due to lacking any water and oxygen and extent amount of carbon dioxide, nitrogen and sulfuric acid, it will be unlikely to establishing any station on the Venus. In contrast, the professor points out that existence of such chemicals could be a prime sign of producing water from them. Also, water and oxygen are necessary for vitality but they can be obtained from the atmosphere.
Finally, the author of the reading claims that thick clouds on the Venus surface would reflect 60 percent of the sunlight and it causes that there was no sufficient sunlight to generate electricity to power machines and equipment. On the contrary, the speaker argues that there are no thick clouds around the Venus and the sunlight can across through the clouds layer and although they reflect the sunlight, it refers to the shallow layer of clouds and the deep layers across the sun and can be beneficial for generating electric power.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 153, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... times greater than the Earths surface. Therefore all spacecraft will be crushed in this ...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, so, therefore, well, while, in addition, in contrast, as well as, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 7.30242825607 205% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 30.3222958057 122% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1474.0 1373.03311258 107% => OK
No of words: 297.0 270.72406181 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96296296296 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.522481083 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 145.348785872 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518518518519 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 419.366225166 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.9066198863 49.2860985944 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.0 110.228320801 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 21.698381199 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4545454545 7.06452816374 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351931813881 0.272083759551 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119891592471 0.0996497079465 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0679872876658 0.0662205650399 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184155384787 0.162205337803 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620959300649 0.0443174109184 140% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.3589403974 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 53.8541721854 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.0289183223 114% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.42419426049 108% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 63.6247240618 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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