TOEFL integrated writing: Dutch painter Rembrandt

The listening claims that the portrait was made by Rembrandt. This claim is not in agreement with that of the reading passage, which suggest that the painting of elderly women was not the work of Rembrandt as there are number of problems in this painting.

According to the lecture, examination of fur collar was done again by x ray technology and the results divulge that this luxurious fur was not the part of original painting. This extra layer was added by someone after 100 years to increase the value of painting by making it resemble to a aristrocratic lady. The passage, by contrast sugges...

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is not done by Rembrandt, who being a master painter could not have made such an error.
is not done by Rembrandt, whom being a master painter could not have made such an error.

Sentence: This extra layer was added by someone after 100 years to increase the value of painting by making it resemble to a aristrocratic lady.
Error: aristrocratic Suggestion: aristocratic

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