TOEFL T P O 1 Integrated Writing Task

The reading and the lecture are both about whether or not an employee should work a four-day week instead of five days per week. While the author of the article argues that there are much more advantages in four-day week selection, the lecturer disputes the claims mentioned in the article. His position is that working four day a week would worsen the situation rather than an improvising.
According to the reading, decrease weekday at work results an increase in company profits. Having more time for life activities, employees will be more satisfied. Hence, they will work more efficiently. This argument is challenged by the lecturer. He claims that if company allows their employees to work 4 days per week, it will be more costly. As both reading and lecturer agree on increase of company staffs, this makes the company spend more money for new workers as their training, medical fees. Additionally, he points out that it will cost company more on office space and required devices.
Secondly, the author suggests there will be a lower in unemployment rate. The more employees choose work in 4 days the more human resource company needed to fill the workload. The lecturer, however, asserts that the decreasement in work time prevents advancing of employee in work. Who chooses to spend more time at work are likely to be able to propose to be a management. He goes on that this put four-day week worker in bad position when crisis occurs.
Finally, the authors put forth the idea that employee will feel happier. Staff who works less time per week is able to spend more time on their personal life's aspects. In contrast, the lecturer's stance is company might require their staff to work overtime to make up for workload requirements.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 44, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... reading and the lecture are both about whether or not an employee should work a four-day week...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 283, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Who” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...prevents advancing of employee in work. Who chooses to spend more time at work are ...
^^^
Line 4, column 186, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'lecturers'' or 'lecturer's'?
Suggestion: lecturers'; lecturer's
...ersonal lifes aspects. In contrast, the lecturers stance is company might require their s...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1449.0 1373.03311258 106% => OK
No of words: 296.0 270.72406181 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89527027027 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53780536706 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537162162162 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 419.366225166 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.2163398967 49.2860985944 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.5 110.228320801 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4444444444 21.698381199 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.83333333333 7.06452816374 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.3589403974 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 53.8541721854 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 12.2367328918 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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