TOEFL T P O 20 Integrated Writing Task

The reading passage and the lecture both discuss a policy, merits and demerits of the policy that it was 'let in burn'. In the reading part the author mentiones that there was a policy that made a huge and extensive caouse in the forest in US in 1988, which in fire destroyed everything, three main damages are illustarted in this part. In the listening part, however, the proffesor challenges what the author states and rebutes the reasons by indicate that not only is fire natural, but also it would create variety of features, therefore it would be ok and good.
To begin with, as mentioned in the article, the writer sets forth that it ruined many various trees and vegetable an that aria; nevertheless, the speaker rebutes the reaons asserting that vegatatons actually became various on that time, making aportunity to grow different specious. For example, it makes best chance for smaller plants to grow and take solar energies, whenever there is no tall trees to take it complitlty. Indeed, the seed of plant would be taken enough heat to raise and nurture bether.
Secondly, the author poins out that samaller species of animals will not scape in this situation or will died, hence massive extinction. Nonetheless, the author flately contradicts the idea and contends that as same as plants, animals can live aftre the fire on the forst and it could create new aportunity for smaller specious such as rabbits to make new habitate and also it changes chain foods to posetive altering. it means that smaller animals would not be hunted strongly.
Finally, the author claims that tourist attraction for this natural park reduced and local economic had altered dramatically. In contrast, the professor is off the opinion that ranging from fire to low rain fall and heat waves made the weather disaster. Although the weather after the fire was not good, the visitors came back next year and it would not a serious problem for local residents.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 115, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ruined many various trees and vegetable an that aria; nevertheless, the speaker re...
^^
Line 2, column 115, Rule ID: AN_THEN[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'and that'?
Suggestion: and that
...ruined many various trees and vegetable an that aria; nevertheless, the speaker rebutes...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 299, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'makes the best'.
Suggestion: makes the best
...row different specious. For example, it makes best chance for smaller plants to grow and t...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 106, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'die'
Suggestion: die
...ill not scape in this situation or will died, hence massive extinction. Nonetheless,...
^^^^
Line 3, column 419, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...anges chain foods to posetive altering. it means that smaller animals would not be...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, hence, however, if, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in contrast, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 7.30242825607 219% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 22.412803532 120% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1619.0 1373.03311258 118% => OK
No of words: 330.0 270.72406181 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90606060606 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45590871233 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 145.348785872 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587878787879 0.540411800872 109% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 419.366225166 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.2425856111 49.2860985944 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.916666667 110.228320801 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5 21.698381199 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.1666666667 7.06452816374 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.3589403974 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 53.8541721854 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.0289183223 114% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 63.6247240618 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.7273730684 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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