TOEFL T P O 32 Integrated Writing Task

Both the passage and the lecturer discuss about the quaker like sound detected by submarines solar.The passage connotes three possible theories regarding the source of this noise whereas the lecturer dissents these claims by presenting some counterclaims against it,

To begin with, the passage mentions that the linking source of the quacker sound to be of the orca whales mating rituals since some studies suggest are these sounds are produced in order to attract the males.However, in contrast the lecturer opposes this fact by stating that orca whales have proclivity to inhabit areas near the ocean surface while the submarines occupancy is more towards in deeper aspect of the ocean so the source being the orca whale for these sounds is highly unlikely.

Secondly, the passage argues that sound could be of the aquatic colossal squid whichnot only reside in the deep ocean but also survive on fishes , whereas the lecturer dissents these arguments by illuminatiing that russian submarines first captured these sounds in the 1960 which then disappered later for almost 2 decades and then reappeared again in the 1980, which captures the idea that squids were always there during these years as well even in todays times ,despite the sounds presence or absence.

Lastly, the passage asserts that the sound source could be of the foreign country's submarine or a secret one which were not registered with the soanr technology capacity.The lectures rebuts these assertion by stating that even in todays era there are no submarines constructed with expeditious changing direction capacities as well of the silent engine formations rasisng doubts on the foreign submarine idea.

Therefore, in nutshell the passage proposes three claims to be the source of quacker like noise but the lecturer casts doubts on them by illuminating certain facts making these claims rife with holes,

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 100, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...like sound detected by submarines solar.The passage connotes three possible theorie...
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Line 3, column 178, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...es suggest are these sounds are produced in order to attract the males.However, i...
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Line 3, column 210, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: However
...produced in order to attract the males.However, in contrast the lecturer opposes this ...
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Line 3, column 356, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'submarines'' or 'submarine's'?
Suggestion: submarines'; submarine's
... areas near the ocean surface while the submarines occupancy is more towards in deeper asp...
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Line 5, column 93, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the aquatic colossal squid whichnot only reside in the deep ocean but also surviv...
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Line 5, column 146, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...he deep ocean but also survive on fishes , whereas the lecturer dissents these arg...
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Line 5, column 465, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...these years as well even in todays times ,despite the sounds presence or absence. ...
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Line 5, column 479, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sounds'' or 'sound's'?
Suggestion: sounds'; sound's
... well even in todays times ,despite the sounds presence or absence. Lastly, the pas...
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Line 7, column 93, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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Suggestion:
...uld be of the foreign countrys submarine or a secret one which were not registere...
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Suggestion: The
...ered with the soanr technology capacity.The lectures rebuts these assertion by stat...
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Line 7, column 185, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'rebut'.
Suggestion: rebut
... soanr technology capacity.The lectures rebuts these assertion by stating that even in...
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Line 7, column 192, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this assertion' or 'these assertions'?
Suggestion: this assertion; these assertions
...technology capacity.The lectures rebuts these assertion by stating that even in todays era ther...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, lastly, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, whereas, while, in contrast, in fact, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1596.0 1373.03311258 116% => OK
No of words: 301.0 270.72406181 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3023255814 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51514425356 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 145.348785872 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558139534884 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 419.366225166 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 13.0662251656 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 75.0 21.2450331126 353% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 202.220795172 49.2860985944 410% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 399.0 110.228320801 362% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 75.25 21.698381199 347% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 36.5 7.06452816374 517% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 4.19205298013 286% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 41.2 13.3589403974 308% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -4.65 53.8541721854 -9% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 5.55761589404 263% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 32.5 11.0289183223 295% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.64 12.2367328918 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.71 8.42419426049 139% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 63.6247240618 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 56.0 10.7273730684 522% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 32.0 10.498013245 305% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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