The article states that storing patient's medical records in electronic databases have lots of advantages and provides three reasons of support. However, the professor explains that the benefits that is mentioned in the reading actually are very uncertain and refutes each of the author's reasons.
First, the reading claims that by save the records in electronic format doctors would reduce the costs. The professor opposes this point by saying that it is unlikely being significant. He states that the they cannot save money because doctors would not throw out the paper format of the records and they save them for emergency back up. As a result, not only they have to pay for traditional paper-based record keeping, but they also have to pay to transfer them in electronic version too.
Second, the author posits that in this way, the doctors would reduce the chances of medical error. Nevertheless, the professor contends that the doctors cannot eliminate making errors becausemost doctors still use pen and paper to write the transcripts by hand. According to the professor, after that the doctor's staff would transfer the written transcripts to the electronic version which they would easily make some errors when reading and typing them.
Third, the article avers that the stored electronc versions can be used in aiding research. The professor refutes this point by stating that it is still difficult to access to theses databases. Because the access to these databases is subjected to strict laws. Based on the lecture, people who want to use this information need the permission from patient and patient can easily block the access to their medical records for everyone except for their own treatments.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 202, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'they'?
Suggestion: the; they
...ikely being significant. He states that the they cannot save money because doctors would...
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Line 7, column 195, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ifficult to access to theses databases. Because the access to these databases is subjec...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, still, third, except for, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1443.0 1373.03311258 105% => OK
No of words: 278.0 270.72406181 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19064748201 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48951270651 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 145.348785872 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528776978417 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 419.366225166 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7291917462 49.2860985944 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.0 110.228320801 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3846153846 21.698381199 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06452816374 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.434516926449 0.272083759551 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140006936703 0.0996497079465 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101972672052 0.0662205650399 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24347138894 0.162205337803 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0382442041351 0.0443174109184 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.3589403974 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.2367328918 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.