TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reaso

Universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and they should receive equal financial support. They are both vital to the development of a student both in academics and in their day to day life upbringing, it will help them in acquiring skills not just on education alone but also in realizing the world outside the school walls.
Study rooms are important in other for a student to actualize their dreams, the physical structure of the brain will also need a time to relax at some point in time as it attracts information. Excess information without relaxation could cause an individual to get ill, for instance having headaches, eye pain, and running temperature. Sometimes pills are not so advisable to the body, breakdown of a person can be caused due to adverse effect of the drug.
Health wise it's good for people to workout and get involved in social activities which at another perspective is a form of getting enlightenment and getting information even to those difficult subjects or course an individual is experiencing at the moment. Funds that will see to the improvement of a student should be given attention to, either the school administration or the government should see that student are not been made to follow just one routine, which is go to school and return back home to school work. There should be flexibility and balance, so that students can function efficiently. Learning should be made easy and adaptable. The idea of universities having not just study rooms but recreational facilities, is what i concur with to the utmost extreme.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng the world outside the school walls. Study rooms are important in other for a...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sed due to adverse effect of the drug. Health wise its good for people to worko...
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Line 3, column 471, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'gone'.
Suggestion: gone
...de to follow just one routine, which is go to school and return back home to schoo...
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Line 3, column 488, Rule ID: RETURN_BACK[1]
Message: Use simply 'return'.
Suggestion: return
... one routine, which is go to school and return back home to school work. There should be fl...
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Line 3, column 739, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ms but recreational facilities, is what i concur with to the utmost extreme.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 7.30242825607 205% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 5.0 12.0772626932 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 22.412803532 58% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 5.01324503311 279% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1352.0 1373.03311258 98% => OK
No of words: 271.0 270.72406181 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9889298893 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88314935624 2.5805825403 112% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 145.348785872 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579335793358 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 421.2 419.366225166 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.23620309051 24% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.8055155414 49.2860985944 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.2 110.228320801 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1 21.698381199 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.1 7.06452816374 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119950372487 0.272083759551 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.044514083298 0.0996497079465 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0249202077335 0.0662205650399 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0802380721633 0.162205337803 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0221042605954 0.0443174109184 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.3589403974 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 53.8541721854 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.0289183223 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.2367328918 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 63.6247240618 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.7273730684 177% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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