TPO-01 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, employees typically work five days a week for eight hours each day. However, many employees want to work a four-day week and are willing to accept less pay inorder to do so. A mandatory policy requiri

The reading and the lecture are both about the mandatory policy, which is companies required to offer their employees the option of working a four day workweek for four fifths of the normal pay. The author of the reading believes that the mandatory policy would help out.The lecturer casts doubt on the claims made in the article. He thinks that employees should work a five day week.

First of all the author points out that the shortened work week would increase company profits. It is mentioned that the employees would feel more rested and the result is they would make fewer mistakes in their work. This point is challenged by the lecturer. She says that if employees would work less than the profits would be lowered.

Finally the author states that an option of a four day workweek would be better for individual employees. The article establishes that employees who could afford more free time would be able to spend more time with family and have a better life. The lecturer rebuts this argument. She suggests that this way would cause to decrease job abilities and can lose employees jobs.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 272, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...hat the mandatory policy would help out.The lecturer casts doubt on the claims made...
^^^
Line 1, column 272, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...hat the mandatory policy would help out.The lecturer casts doubt on the claims made...
^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
... than the profits would be lowered. Finally the author states that an option of a f...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 321, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'decreasing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: decreasing
... She suggests that this way would cause to decrease job abilities and can lose employees jo...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 30.3222958057 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 918.0 1373.03311258 67% => OK
No of words: 190.0 270.72406181 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83157894737 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 4.04702891845 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24864378948 2.5805825403 87% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 145.348785872 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.589473684211 0.540411800872 109% => OK
syllable_count: 265.5 419.366225166 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.4088861584 49.2860985944 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.4545454545 110.228320801 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2727272727 21.698381199 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.36363636364 7.06452816374 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.625118485671 0.272083759551 230% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.219628051463 0.0996497079465 220% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138054944124 0.0662205650399 208% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.416220136468 0.162205337803 257% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0231300349327 0.0443174109184 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.3589403974 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 53.8541721854 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.0289183223 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.2367328918 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 63.6247240618 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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