TPO-03 - Integrated Writing Task Rembrandt is the most famous of the seventeenth-century Dutch painters. However, there are doubts whether some paintings attributed to Rembrandt were actually painted by him. One such painting is known as attributed to Rem

The article states that the portrait of the woman’s face could not represented Remabrandt work and provides three reasons of support. Conversely, the professor states that according to thorough examination on this portrait, it reveled that the portrait of elderly woman in the white bonnet is indeed Rembrandt work. She refutes each of the author’s reasons.

First, the reading avers that there is inconsistency about the woman in the portrait is dressed, such as she is wearing a white linen cap a king that only servant would wear, and at same time she is a waering a coat that has a luxurious fur collar. Since Rembrandit was known for his careful attention for details. However, the professor refutes this point by explaining that X-ray results have shown that there was an extra part added to the original portrait. This adding part is the fur collar and it was painted hundred years after its protraited by Rembrandt. The professor explains that the reason for doing so, it would increase its value by showing the artisocratic lady in the portrait. So, the portrait of an elderly woman in white bonnet is clearly Rembrandt work.

Second, the reading claims that Since Rembrandt was a master of light and shadow, these element do fit together in the paiting and thus its not Rembrandt work. The professor, on ther hand, opposess this point by saying that if we removed the adding part from the original portrait, the light and shadow completely fit togther. the woman in the original painting wore light colored clothes that reflect light. As a result the face became illuminated and without doubt the portrait was so realistioc and there was no error in these element. The professor concludes that this painting clearly demonstrates that it was painted by Rembrandt.

Thrid, teh back of painting reveals that it was painted on a panel made of several prices of wood glued together. And thus, its not Rembrandt Work. The professor disagrees with this point by stating that when the fur collar added to the original painting, these pieces of wood were added too. For the reason of enlarging its size, so it would become more valuable. Also, REsearchers have shown that a single wood pieces that examined was made from the same trees that was typically used by Rembrandit other paintings for example, a self protrait with a hat paiting. So, the professor concudes this paiting was indeed the Famous Rembrandit portrait.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'represent'
Suggestion: represent
...rait of the woman's face could not represented Remabrandt work and provides three reas...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...utes this point by explaining that X-ray results have shown that there was an ext...
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Message: Use simply: 'a hundred'.
Suggestion: a hundred
...rt is the fur collar and it was painted hundred years after its protraited by Rembrandt...
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Line 5, column 83, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this element' or 'these elements'?
Suggestion: this element; these elements
...randt was a master of light and shadow, these element do fit together in the paiting and thus...
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...do fit together in the paiting and thus its not Rembrandt work. The professor, on t...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...ight and shadow completely fit togther. the woman in the original painting wore lig...
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Message: Did you mean 'this element' or 'these elements'?
Suggestion: this element; these elements
...so realistioc and there was no error in these element. The professor concludes that this pain...
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...rices of wood glued together. And thus, its not Rembrandt Work. The professor disag...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... so it would become more valuable. Also, REsearchers have shown that a single woo...
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Line 7, column 415, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'piece'?
Suggestion: piece
...searchers have shown that a single wood pieces that examined was made from the same t...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ingle wood pieces that examined was made from the same trees that was typically u...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, first, however, if, second, so, thus, for example, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 10.4613686534 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 12.0772626932 166% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 22.412803532 201% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2033.0 1373.03311258 148% => OK
No of words: 409.0 270.72406181 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9706601467 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.04702891845 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5553011617 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 145.348785872 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476772616137 0.540411800872 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 601.2 419.366225166 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.23620309051 170% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0502356262 49.2860985944 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.65 110.228320801 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.45 21.698381199 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45 7.06452816374 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 4.19205298013 262% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.27373068433 211% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.502552307306 0.272083759551 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155530332176 0.0996497079465 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0893793984976 0.0662205650399 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.311180288824 0.162205337803 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103670325958 0.0443174109184 234% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 63.6247240618 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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