TPO-03 - Integrated Writing Task Rembrandt is the most famous of the seventeenth-century Dutch painters. However, there are doubts whether some paintings attributed to Rembrandt were actually painted by him. One such painting is known as attributed to Rem

The reading and the Lecture are both about Rembrandt’s painting. The author of the reading believes that painting was not created by Rembrandt. The lecturer cast to points on the claim made in the article.He thinks that original painting was different from that of Rembrandt’ painting, so that’s why we feel that painting was not created by him.
First of all, the author point out about the women’s dressing. It is mentioned in the reading the women is wearing a dress whose collar was having fur which was white in color. It was representing luxury as it was so costly that no one can afford. This point is challenged by the lecturer that in the original painting there was no such furry collar on her dress, instead a simple white collar was there. He said that than why exactly this changes where depicted by the painter. Furthermore, he argues that the changes might have created to increase the popularity of the painting in order to make it more professional.
Secondly, the author contends that Rembrandt was professional in displaying right mixture of light and shadow in the painting. The article note that this was not reflected in the painting created by Rembrandt about the women. The author rebuts that proportion of light and shadow was not manageable that’s the reason the face of the women was in dark and not visible properly. He suggests that it would have been good if the painter had created the original version because, due to the furry collar the measurement of light and shadow deviated and so the painting is not able to display women’s face appropriately.
Finally, the author states that painting was created on a plan which was integrated from several wood of trees. The lecturer on the other hand, posits that the original painting was created on single plan, and was made of the same wood which Rembrandt had used. He put forth the idea that it was more feasible to create the original version of the painting rather than making changes, because this was the reason why the painting created by Rembrandt was having several issues

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 150, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... painting was not created by Rembrandt. The lecturer cast to points on the claim ma...
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Line 1, column 211, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: He
...points on the claim made in the article.He thinks that original painting was diffe...
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Line 2, column 166, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: white
...s whose collar was having fur which was white in color. It was representing luxury as it was s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 10.4613686534 249% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 12.0772626932 182% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 22.412803532 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1738.0 1373.03311258 127% => OK
No of words: 356.0 270.72406181 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88202247191 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6571549 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438202247191 0.540411800872 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 518.4 419.366225166 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.113307051 49.2860985944 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.625 110.228320801 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 21.698381199 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6875 7.06452816374 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.388603483345 0.272083759551 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162093134822 0.0996497079465 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0842520434082 0.0662205650399 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.276645961189 0.162205337803 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0448386418061 0.0443174109184 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.3589403974 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.42419426049 88% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 63.6247240618 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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