TPO-04 - Integrated Writing Task Endotherms are animals such as modern birds and mammals that keep their body temperatures constant. For instance, humans are endotherms and maintain an internal temperature of 37°C, no matter whether the environment is wa

The lecture and the reading passage talks about the evidence to classify dinosaurs as endothermic animals. While the reading states three reasons to support that dinosaurs were endotherms, the lecture refutes the claim, saying that the reasons stated in the passage doesn't provide enough evidence to support the claim.

First of all, the reading claims that dinosaur fossils found in Polar region suggests dinosaurs were endotherms. Since animals who can maintain their internal body temperature can survive the harsh cold environment. But the lecture point it out that polar temperature today is much colder than it was before when dinosaurs were alive. Also, dinosaurs could have adapted the strategy of migration to escape the cold winter months or like reptiles hibernated during the winter.

Next the reading makes the argument that leg position and movement are connected with endothermy, which enables sustained physical activities like running. Dinosaurs and modern endotherms like birds have similar leg positions. The lecture counters this point by stating the underneath body legs' position supports the weight efficiently than side legs position. Also, large size of dinosaurs was an added surviving advantage.

Lastly, the reading article argues that there is a connection between endothermy and bone structure. Bones of endotherms have Haversian canals allows the animal to grow quicky. Rapid growth is a characteristic of endotherms. Fossils of dinosaurs indicates presence of Haversian canals. The lecture refutes the claim by pointing out that Haversian canals in endotherms show growth of bone rings along with thickening of bones. Periods of rapid growth and slow growth show non-endothermic trait, displayed by reptiles. Moreover, endothermic animals exhibit constant growth rate regardless of the surrounding cold temperature.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 267, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... that the reasons stated in the passage doesnt provide enough evidence to support the ...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 114, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ion suggests dinosaurs were endotherms. Since animals who can maintain their internal...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, lastly, moreover, so, while, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 22.412803532 49% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 5.01324503311 219% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1579.0 1373.03311258 115% => OK
No of words: 277.0 270.72406181 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.70036101083 5.08290768461 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71006865284 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 145.348785872 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592057761733 0.540411800872 110% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 419.366225166 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.5223207926 49.2860985944 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.8823529412 110.228320801 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2941176471 21.698381199 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.70588235294 7.06452816374 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.496690422493 0.272083759551 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155138122058 0.0996497079465 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643386792423 0.0662205650399 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.270066319579 0.162205337803 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0737050112705 0.0443174109184 166% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.3589403974 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 53.8541721854 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.48 12.2367328918 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.73 8.42419426049 116% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 63.6247240618 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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