TPO-09 - Integrated Writing Task Car manufacturers and governments have been eagerly seeking a replacement for the automobile's main source of power, the internal-combustion engine. By far the most promising alternative source of energy for cars is the hy

The reading and the lecture both discuss the replacement of the internal-combustion engine.While the reading states that fuel cell have several advantanges, the lecture casts doubt this idea by saying that it is too optimistic to say that fuel cell can replace the current engine.

First, The reading passage claims that internal combustion engines depends to much in petroleum products such as gasoline and diesel which are non renewable source of energy likely to waste.In addition the reading adds that fuel cell that use hydrogen can derived from different sources such as natural gas and water, so it makes them to be more attractive for consumers.However,the professor argues that even if water is easy to obtain, the production of hydrogen is difficult to process since it required a special treatment and storage that would need a new technology.

Second, the reading points out that fuel cell will solve that pollution’s problems related with the emision of carbon dioxide to the atmosphere since the only by-product of the hydrogen’s process is water.The professor counters this idea by saying that in fact the use of fuel cell increase that release of carbon dioxide to the enviroment because the hydrogen required a purification process that use energy that is main obtained from fossil fuel incresing the escape of this harmful gases.

Finally, the reading passage explains that fuel cell will be competitive in the future since the new engine based on hydrogen is more efficient that the internal combustion engines, as a result, this new engine use less energy to do the same distances.The professor refutes this idea by saying that the new engine has a disavantage which is that it uses a scarce and expensive metal for the combustion. Therefore, Instead of decreasing the cost, it will increase it. Moreover the proffesor addresses that there have been many unsuccessful experiments to replace this special metal.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...hat internal combustion engines depends to much in petroleum products such as gaso...
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...ewable source of energy likely to waste.In addition the reading adds that fuel cel...
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...ble source of energy likely to waste.In addition the reading adds that fuel cell that us...
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...hem to be more attractive for consumers.However,the professor argues that even if water...
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...e since the new engine based on hydrogen is more efficient that the internal comb...
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...creasing the cost, it will increase it. Moreover the proffesor addresses that there have...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, while, in addition, in fact, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 12.0772626932 174% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 22.412803532 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 5.01324503311 219% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1639.0 1373.03311258 119% => OK
No of words: 313.0 270.72406181 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23642172524 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9762093966 2.5805825403 115% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 145.348785872 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517571884984 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 419.366225166 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 13.0662251656 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 52.0 21.2450331126 245% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 188.50766268 49.2860985944 382% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 273.166666667 110.228320801 248% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 52.1666666667 21.698381199 240% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 18.5 7.06452816374 262% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 4.19205298013 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.461578992978 0.272083759551 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.20887637474 0.0996497079465 210% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115905698586 0.0662205650399 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.286475262035 0.162205337803 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0205759779215 0.0443174109184 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 29.3 13.3589403974 219% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 10.24 53.8541721854 19% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.8 11.0289183223 225% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.0 12.2367328918 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.55 8.42419426049 125% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 63.6247240618 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 10.7273730684 266% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 22.8 10.498013245 217% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 29.0 11.2008830022 259% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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