TPO 1 Integrated Writing

The reading passage discuses the advantages of reducing working hour of employees in the United States. In contrast, the lecturer refutes that the rationale given by the author are not convincing, and totally disagrees with the writer.
According to the author, the company can make profit if they reduce the working days in a week. However, the lecturer cast doubt on this. He says even though the salary of the employees would also reduce with reduced working days, but the company has to spend even more money instead of making profit. He also adds that providing training, medical benefits, more office space for new workers require more money to spend on employees which cuts from the profit.
Second, the author claims that as working days will be reduced, it also will create more job vacancy or reduce the unemployment problem. On the other hand, the speaker denies this idea by saying that it is very much possible that the company might raise their expectations. They can want to get same amount of work with four days that the employees do with five days. In addition, the speaker also asserts that the company can ask the employees to do overtime; if it would happen, then no extra job opportunities would be created. This totally contradicts with writer’s idea.
Finally, the author mentions that employees can provide enough time with their family which upgrades their standard of lives. Conversely, the speaker points out that reducing working hour and providing extra time with family might cause more risk to their job, as the company prefers workers who can provide more incessant time on their work, the worker who would do less become sufferer. At the same time it would be difficult for them to get promotion. Instead, they might loss their job if economic downturn happen.

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No. of Different Words: 155 150
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