TPO 12 Integrated Writing (Jane Austin)
In the lecture, the professor makes several points to as to why a professional painted is a portrait of a teenager girl owned by a member of the Austin family has come up for sale does not make scence. Infact the professor casts doubt on the reading through a number of points elaborated as follows.
The first point that the professor mentions to refute the reading is that Austin family endorsed that the girl in the portrait is Austin. According to the professor, Jane Austin was dead on 1882. So her family did not see her for 70 years after. Thus, this point proves that the main idea of the reading wrong.
Another important point that the professor mentions to undermine the validity of the reading is the features are still similar to those of teenager girl in the painting. As is pointed out by the professor, the resembalance between the portrait and authentic sketch could be explained by hypothesize that the portrait is one of relative of Jane when the relative was teenager. Therefore, this points proves the main idea of the reading wrong.
The last important point that professor brought up which runs counter to the reading is the styles links it to Humphrey who was kind of professional the wealthy Auston family would hire. As a matter of fact, the professor asserts that, the stamp on the back of the canvas suggest that portrait was painted at least 27 years after much older than Jane. Hence, this point proves the main idea of the reading wrong
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Sentence: In the lecture, the professor makes several points to as to why a professional painted is a portrait of a teenager girl owned by a member of the Austin family has come up for sale does not make scence.
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a conjunction, subordinating
Suggestion: Refer to to and as
the professor makes several points to as to why a professional painted is a portrait of a teenager girl owned by a member of the Austin family has come up for sale does not make scence.
Description: can you re-write this sentence?
this point proves that the main idea of the reading wrong.
this point proves that the main idea of the reading is wrong.
Another important point that the professor mentions to undermine the validity of the reading is the features are still similar to those of teenager girl in the painting.
Another important point that the professor mentions to undermine the validity of the reading is that the features are still similar to those of teenager girl in the painting.
Therefore, this points proves the main idea of the reading wrong.
Therefore, this point proves the main idea of the reading is wrong.
The last important point that professor brought up which runs counter to the reading is the styles links it to Humphrey who was kind of professional the wealthy Auston family would hire.
Description: can you re-write this sentence? need to make sentences shorter and logically correct
Sentence: In the lecture, the professor makes several points to as to why a professional painted is a portrait of a teenager girl owned by a member of the Austin family has come up for sale does not make scence.
Error: scence Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: As is pointed out by the professor, the resembalance between the portrait and authentic sketch could be explained by hypothesize that the portrait is one of relative of Jane when the relative was teenager.
Error: resembalance Suggestion: resemblance
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
Don't repeat words, phrases and sentences. like:
this point proves the main idea of the reading wrong
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 18 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 12 12
No. of Words: 259 250
No. of Characters: 1187 1200
No. of Different Words: 122 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.012 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.583 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.375 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 59 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 37 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.583 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.388 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.432 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.603 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.099 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4