The reader claims three possible ways to protect the Torreya from retrograding and provides reasons for support. On the other hand, the professor counters each specific points and presents clues to call into the information in the passage. Moreover, he says ideas of replanting the Torreya non-productive and groundless.
First, the reader discusses the replanting the plant in the same location, this means surviving the Terreya in the north part of Florida. The professor casts doubt on this point by explaining the ideas is not worthwhile because all of the areas threatened by the global warming, and each parts of Florida will suffer from the drying.
Second, the reader states the relocation of the Torreya to the new place with the better chance of the climate. The professor argues this point by telling that the outcomes and results of the new location growth cannot be predicted, and we did that before, and the consequence shocks us, due to the overgrowth of the transfer plant and the competition with the original plant for the resources. So the Native plants also may undergo dropping.
Third, the reader disputes the planting of the Torreyainthe lab, so there is more chance to control the weathers and special requirements. Conversely, the speaker encounters this by saying we cannot provide the plant with all these resources especially those related to the safety of the plant and protected them from diseases, because of the new growth plant cannot survive for a long time. Further more the presence of the plant in their original location gives them more resistance to capture the disease due to their larger population.
- TOEFL TPO 20 - Integrated Writing Task 67
- TPO-31 - Integrated Writing Task A fossil skeleton of a dinosaur called Sinosauropteryx, preserved in volcanic ash, was discovered in Liaoning, China, in 1996. Interestingly, the fossil included a pattern of fine lines surrounding the skeletal bones. Some 65
- TPO-18 - Integrated Writing Task In the 1950s Torreya taxifoha, a type of evergreen tree once very common in the state of Florida, started to die out. No one is sure exactly what caused the decline, but chances are good that if nothing is done, Torreya wi 81
- TPO 30 60
- Tpo 43 72
Essay evaluation report
because all of the areas threatened by the global warming
because all of the areas are threatened by the global warming
because of the new growth plant cannot survive for a long time.
because the new growth plant cannot survive for a long time.
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flaws:
you still have issues on 'because' and 'because of'
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 12
No. of Words: 270 250
No. of Characters: 1344 1200
No. of Different Words: 146 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.054 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.978 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.57 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.545 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.68 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.37 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.62 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.147 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 550, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ing the ideas is not worthwhile because all of the areas threatened by the global warming,...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 328, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... plant and protected them from diseases, because of the new growth plant cannot s...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, third, while, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 10.4613686534 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 12.0772626932 17% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1374.0 1373.03311258 100% => OK
No of words: 270.0 270.72406181 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08888888889 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65469535115 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 145.348785872 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540740740741 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 404.1 419.366225166 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.0047488141 49.2860985944 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.909090909 110.228320801 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5454545455 21.698381199 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.90909090909 7.06452816374 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218141389775 0.272083759551 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.082788479147 0.0996497079465 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0495683259411 0.0662205650399 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141871905073 0.162205337803 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0470139667039 0.0443174109184 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.3589403974 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.2367328918 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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