TPO-20 - Integrated Writing Task
The passage states that the "let it burn" policy is not a good policy and it has three kinds of damage to the forests. however, the lecturer finds the reasons provided by the passage dubious and gives some evidence in order to refute them all.
The passage claims that the Yellowstone fires caused tremendous damage to the park's trees and other vegetation. When the fire died out, what had been a national treasure seemed like a devastated wasteland. Conversely, the lecturer asserts that fire is a natural part of a forest's life and it is not only destructive, but also constructive too. Even though it causes trees to burn, it lets new vegetation to appear in the area. As an example after the Yellowstone fire the area was colonized by new plants that had the opportunity to grow after the trees were burned and the shadow of the trees was removed. Another point is that some seeds of some certain sorts of plants needs high temperature to germinate and after the fire these plants had the opportunity to grow.
Furthermore, the passage holds the view that after the large fire the park's wildlife was affected as well. Large animals were seen fleeing from fire and smaller species were unable to escape. Also the food chain in the area will be disrupted for the animals who survived. In contrast, the lecturer underlines the fact that fire will provide new opportunities for small plants and small animals who inhabit these small plants. For example, rabbits and haier and the predators who feed on them will come to the area.
Finally, the passage asserts that the fire comprises the value of the park as tourist attraction, which in turn will have negative consequences on the local economy. On the other hand, the lecturer dismisses the issue due to the fact that fire will effect tourists if they happen every year, but they do not happen every year and the fire in Yellowstone was vast because of reasons like great wind and no rain and some other factors. And even after that great fire the tourists came to the area the next year and each year.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 131, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...s three kinds of damage to the forests. however, the lecturer finds the reasons provide...
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Line 2, column 273, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'forests'' or 'forest's'?
Suggestion: forests'; forest's
...sserts that fire is a natural part of a forests life and it is not only destructive, bu...
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Line 3, column 71, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parks'' or 'park's'?
Suggestion: parks'; park's
... the view that after the large fire the parks wildlife was affected as well. Large an...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 193, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... smaller species were unable to escape. Also the food chain in the area will be disr...
^^^^
Line 4, column 250, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...he issue due to the fact that fire will effect tourists if they happen every year, but...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, finally, furthermore, however, if, so, well, as to, for example, in contrast, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 7.30242825607 233% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 30.3222958057 129% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1708.0 1373.03311258 124% => OK
No of words: 362.0 270.72406181 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7182320442 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39045904283 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 145.348785872 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491712707182 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 539.1 419.366225166 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8759791023 49.2860985944 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.75 110.228320801 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.625 21.698381199 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.375 7.06452816374 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.426963507769 0.272083759551 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144336460407 0.0996497079465 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0834736737344 0.0662205650399 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22650087397 0.162205337803 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0955856153631 0.0443174109184 216% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.2367328918 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.42419426049 94% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 63.6247240618 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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