TPO-23 - Integrated Writing Task Populations of the yellow cedar, a species of tree that is common in northwestern North America, have been steadily declining for more than a century now, since about 1880. Scientists have advanced several hypotheses expla

In these set of materials, the reading provides three hypotheses regarding the reduction of the yellow cedars' population in northwestern North America. On the other hand, the professor says that author's hypotheses are not convincing and refutes each of them by providing reasons.

Initially, the reading claims that the cedar bark beetles are the main cause of this population reduction of yellow cedars because they eat the wood and there have been recorded instances. On the contrary, the professor states that the cedar bark beetles attack the yellow cedars which are already damaged and are going to die any way. He says that healthy yellow cedar are much more resistance to the bark beetles due to the fact that the healthy yellow cedars produce especial toxin against beetles.

Furthermore, the reading mentions that brown bears, that feed on the sweet contained in yellow cedars, lead to the population reduction. In contrast, the professor accounts this notion by saying that there are no brown bears in the Island, but still the population reduction has been observed. He said due to the fact that with or without bears the population redution happens, brown bears are not the main cause of this reduction.

Finally, the reading explains that the population reduction of yellow cedars originates from recent climate change. The author says that since these plants start to reproduce in late winter instead of early spring, the new yellow cedars may be freezed at cold winter nights. Nevertheless, the professor refers to the evidences that more yellow cedars dead in warmer places that cooler places. new

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 104, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cedars'' or 'cedar's'?
Suggestion: cedars'; cedar's
...s regarding the reduction of the yellow cedars population in northwestern North Americ...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, furthermore, may, nevertheless, regarding, so, still, in contrast, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 5.01324503311 279% => Less nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1357.0 1373.03311258 99% => OK
No of words: 262.0 270.72406181 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17938931298 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47916849786 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 145.348785872 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511450381679 0.540411800872 95% => OK
syllable_count: 403.2 419.366225166 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 20.7340499287 49.2860985944 42% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 123.363636364 110.228320801 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8181818182 21.698381199 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4545454545 7.06452816374 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340205739401 0.272083759551 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135118255001 0.0996497079465 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0746238890497 0.0662205650399 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196006719287 0.162205337803 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0868495868878 0.0443174109184 196% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.3589403974 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 53.8541721854 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 63.6247240618 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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are much more resistance
are much more resistant

more yellow cedars dead in warmer places that cooler places.
more yellow cedars are dead in warmer places that cooler places.

Sentence: He said due to the fact that with or without bears the population redution happens, brown bears are not the main cause of this reduction.
Error: redution Suggestion: reduction

Sentence: The author says that since these plants start to reproduce in late winter instead of early spring, the new yellow cedars may be freezed at cold winter nights.
Error: freezed Suggestion: No alternate word

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 25 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 11 12
No. of Words: 262 250
No. of Characters: 1322 1200
No. of Different Words: 132 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.023 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.046 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.381 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 67 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.386 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.438 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.668 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.182 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4