TPO-24 - Integrated Writing Task Animal fossils usually provide very little opportunity to study the actual animal tissues, because in fossils the animals' living tissues have been largely replaced by minerals. Thus, scientists were very excited recently

Living tissues of dead animals are usually replaced with minerals and so in their fossils we cannot hope to find those tissues. However scientists suported proposed idea, a fossil of 70-million-year-old dinosaur were found by some researchers recently which contains the probable signs of the living tissues of the Tyrannosaurus rex (T.rex) as mentioned inthe reading passage. When, scientists opened the leg bone of the animal, they found out some kind of animal living tissue which resemble the blood vessels, red blood cells and also collagen fibers of T.rex. Although this finding can be a revolutinary discovery in archeology and biological sciences, professor disagrees with the results of the finding.

He says in the lecture, the soft tissue in the leg bone may be came from bacterial origin which they are bateries traces or may be came from their colonis.
Also according to the reading passage, researches thought that the iron substances in the spherical particles inside the leg bone is a sign of red blood cells because iron is vital substance in the oxygen transport in the blood vessels. But professor disagree with it and declairs, iron was found in other fossiels and this is in contradiction with the researchers thoughts.

Finally, collogen fibers cannot be exsisted through such a long time and it may be came from human origin. for example it can be added to the bone from the hand of one of scientists

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...rannosaurus rex T.rex as mentioned inthe reading passage. When, scientists opened...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, may, so, for example, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 12.0772626932 33% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 22.412803532 58% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1195.0 1373.03311258 87% => OK
No of words: 237.0 270.72406181 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04219409283 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92362132708 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75434686934 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 145.348785872 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.57805907173 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 364.5 419.366225166 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.23620309051 24% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.8133491172 49.2860985944 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.777777778 110.228320801 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3333333333 21.698381199 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.44444444444 7.06452816374 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.39914176443 0.272083759551 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15178487523 0.0996497079465 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102631111695 0.0662205650399 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208992981745 0.162205337803 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1132331924 0.0443174109184 256% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.3589403974 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.52 8.42419426049 113% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 63.6247240618 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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