TPO-45 - Integrated Writing Task Any student of paleontology will be struck by the fact that a great many animals of the past were considerably larger than they are today. This holds true for species ranging from dinosaurs to most mammals. Just why they w

According to the reading passage, a 200 million-years-old fossil has been found in Arizona. The fossil which indeed is like the bee nest may be a evidence for the existence of the bees in about 200 million years ago. The skeptics refute this probability with three proposed reasons. However, the professor opposes all of them.

First of all, the author mentions that none of the bee fossils were found earlier than 100 million years ago. The professor confirms with the proposed statement but he has a different viewpoint on that. He states that the real reason behind the lack of bee fossils older than 100 million years old means that the trees which can produce a specific kind of resin do not exist before that date. The aforementioned resin could preserve the fossils during a long period.

Second, the professor and the author both agree with the close relationship between bees and flowering plants. However, the professor argues that the ancient bee could be relayed on the non-flowering plants such as pine trees.

Finally, the author states that the founded nest does not have the spiral caps which all the modern ones have it. The professor sees the nest from another perspective. He mentions although the nest does not have any spiral cap, instead it has the same chemical material which both the modern and ancient bees use it as the waterproof material inside the nest.

In brief, the professor and author give contradicting ideas about the presence of the bees in 200 million years ago. The professor illustrates the positive side of the skeptics’ doubts. Consequently, he corroborates that the modern bees can have a 200 million years old ancestor.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 145, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...hich indeed is like the bee nest may be a evidence for the existence of the bees ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, in brief, kind of, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1403.0 1373.03311258 102% => OK
No of words: 281.0 270.72406181 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99288256228 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63333172756 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 145.348785872 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512455516014 0.540411800872 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 410.4 419.366225166 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.23620309051 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.1464117326 49.2860985944 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.6875 110.228320801 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5625 21.698381199 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5625 7.06452816374 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.27373068433 211% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.055453782518 0.272083759551 20% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0219971170372 0.0996497079465 22% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0163695359593 0.0662205650399 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0340067590443 0.162205337803 21% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0179858818283 0.0443174109184 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.3589403974 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 63.6247240618 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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