TPO-24 - Integrated Writing Task Animal fossils usually provide very little opportunity to study the actual animal tissues, because in fossils the animals' living tissues have been largely replaced by minerals. Thus, scientists were very excited recently

The reading claims they can catch lots of things from a 70-million-years old fossil of T.rex . In contrast, the professor explains that It is not possible that after millions of years there is any evidence that we can rely on it.

First, the lecture states that they can find small branches on leg bone's fossil. He said that these are the T.rex's blood vessels, but on the other hand, the professor claim that when a creature die bacteria in its vessels growth and that small branches wasn't vessels.

Second, the reading states that they could find some sphere on that leg bone fossil. It reveals that it remain from the animal's red blood cells, but on the other hand, the professor said that it is not possible that the cells could remain in that times.

Third, the reading states that they can find some collagen on dinosaur bone, and it is a fibrous protein that is a main component of o living bone tissues, but the professor states that it is not possible that the collagen could remain for 70-million years, and these collagens maybe come from the human's skins.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 93, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...m a 70-million-years old fossil of T.rex . In contrast, the professor explains tha...
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Line 3, column 254, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
... vessels growth and that small branches wasnt vessels. Second, the reading states ...
^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'third', 'in contrast', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.278846153846 0.261695866417 107% => OK
Verbs: 0.120192307692 0.158904122519 76% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0673076923077 0.0723426182421 93% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0240384615385 0.0435111971325 55% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0673076923077 0.0277247811725 243% => OK
Prepositions: 0.153846153846 0.128828473217 119% => OK
Participles: 0.00480769230769 0.0370669169778 13% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.24750683454 2.5805825403 87% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0 0.0208969081088 0% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.125 0.128158765124 98% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0336538461538 0.0158828679856 212% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00961538461538 0.0114777025283 84% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1074.0 1645.83664459 65% => OK
No of words: 191.0 271.125827815 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.62303664921 6.08160592843 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71756304063 4.04852973271 92% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.303664921466 0.374372842146 81% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.193717277487 0.287516216867 67% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.130890052356 0.187439937562 70% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0471204188482 0.113142543107 42% => More words length more than 8 chars wanted.
Word Length SD: 2.24750683454 2.5805825403 87% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 145.348785872 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502617801047 0.539623497131 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 42.6731134588 53.8517498576 79% => OK
How many sentences: 7.0 13.0529801325 54% => OK
Sentence length: 27.2857142857 21.7502111507 125% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.3688685371 49.3711431718 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.428571429 132.220823453 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2857142857 21.7502111507 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.14285714286 0.878197800319 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.39072847682 59% => OK
Readability: 46.6574420344 50.5018328374 92% => OK
Elegance: 2.06818181818 1.90840788429 108% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.527122494622 0.549887131256 96% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.199181373772 0.142949733639 139% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.102633797797 0.0787303798458 130% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.761707928851 0.631733273073 121% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.157777608302 0.139662658121 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.306693478767 0.266732575781 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0809053324506 0.103435571967 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.431420948045 0.414875509568 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.138370977979 0.0530846634433 261% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.389501623466 0.40443939384 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0401445419363 0.0528353158467 76% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 4.45695364238 0% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.26048565121 117% => OK
Positive topic words: 2.0 3.49668874172 57% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 3.62251655629 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 5.0 3.1766004415 157% => OK
Total topic words: 7.0 10.2958057395 68% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Minimum 200 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

bacteria in its vessels growth and that small branches wasn't vessels.
bacteria in its vessels grow and that small branches weren't vessels.

could find some sphere
could find some spheres

It reveals that it remain from the animal's red blood cells
It reveals that it remains from the animal's red blood cells

they can find some collagen on dinosaur bone
they can find some collagens on dinosaur's bone

flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Words: 193 250 //Minimum 200 words wanted.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 18 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 12
No. of Words: 193 250
No. of Characters: 857 1200
No. of Different Words: 93 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.727 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.44 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.225 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 52 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 35 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 23 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 8 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.571 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.563 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.857 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.498 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.753 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.149 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4