TPO-24 - Integrated Writing Task Animal fossils usually provide very little opportunity to study the actual animal tissues, because in fossils the animals' living tissues have been largely replaced by minerals. Thus, scientists were very excited recently

Reading states some points to reveal animal tissues found in the 70 million year old T.rex leg's bone. It provides explanation to justify the presence of tissues in the leg's bone. Whereas, lecture challenges those explanation and provides opinion to reject points mentioned in the paragraph.
Firstly, reading mentions that tissues were in branch and hollow shapes which reveals the presence of blood vessels having soft organic material. Contrary to this opinion, lecture states that bones were lying for million years old and probability of bacteria to be there is more. Hollow structure in the fossils could be created by bacteria and traces of soft organic material could be moist residue left by bacteria.
Secondly, reading states that microscopic examination has revealed fossils contains reddish spheres which could be remains of red blood corpuscles having iron material which supports in carrying oxygen. While, lectures states that spherical shapes have been found in the fossils of primitive animals. These fossils does not carry red blood corpuscle which signify that spheres found in the leg's bone can not be remains of red blood corpuscles. Reddish spheres found is the remains of reddish minerals.
Thirdly, reading shows that matrix of fibrous protein delineates presence of collagen in the fossils. Collagen is the biochemical material found in the fossils. Whereas, lecture clarifies that collagen can not last longer. It is skeptical to say that it has been found in the 70 million years old bone. Lecture supports its point by revealing that recent source has shown that collagen use to be there in the human skin.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 208, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this explanation' or 'those explanations'?
Suggestion: this explanation; those explanations
... legs bone. Whereas, lecture challenges those explanation and provides opinion to reject points m...
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Line 2, column 214, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a million'.
Suggestion: a million
...ecture states that bones were lying for million years old and probability of bacteria t...
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Line 3, column 203, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rial which supports in carrying oxygen. While, lectures states that spherical shapes ...
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Line 3, column 315, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'do'.
Suggestion: do
...ils of primitive animals. These fossils does not carry red blood corpuscle which sig...
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Line 4, column 161, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...chemical material found in the fossils. Whereas, lecture clarifies that collagen can no...
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Line 4, column 386, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...t recent source has shown that collagen use to be there in the human skin.
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'firstly', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'third', 'thirdly', 'whereas', 'while']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.302816901408 0.261695866417 116% => OK
Verbs: 0.19014084507 0.158904122519 120% => OK
Adjectives: 0.102112676056 0.0723426182421 141% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0281690140845 0.0435111971325 65% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0140845070423 0.0277247811725 51% => OK
Prepositions: 0.12676056338 0.128828473217 98% => OK
Participles: 0.0774647887324 0.0370669169778 209% => Less participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.45280610604 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0246478873239 0.0208969081088 118% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0633802816901 0.128158765124 49% => Some determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0176056338028 0.0158828679856 111% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0176056338028 0.0114777025283 153% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1635.0 1645.83664459 99% => OK
No of words: 262.0 271.125827815 97% => OK
Chars per words: 6.24045801527 6.08160592843 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.04852973271 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.435114503817 0.374372842146 116% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.354961832061 0.287516216867 123% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.202290076336 0.187439937562 108% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.087786259542 0.113142543107 78% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45280610604 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 145.348785872 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484732824427 0.539623497131 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.5447470583 53.8517498576 85% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0529801325 115% => OK
Sentence length: 17.4666666667 21.7502111507 80% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5663065382 49.3711431718 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.0 132.220823453 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4666666667 21.7502111507 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.878197800319 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 3.39072847682 177% => OK
Readability: 52.9628498728 50.5018328374 105% => OK
Elegance: 2.18181818182 1.90840788429 114% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.648435960155 0.549887131256 118% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.14344905296 0.142949733639 100% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0724360033946 0.0787303798458 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.579244167009 0.631733273073 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0999913356743 0.139662658121 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.283505223182 0.266732575781 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104622938656 0.103435571967 101% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.279221234254 0.414875509568 67% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0420513796635 0.0530846634433 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.442509533199 0.40443939384 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0429520239924 0.0528353158467 81% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.26048565121 188% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 4.0 3.49668874172 114% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.62251655629 83% => OK
Neutral topic words: 7.0 3.1766004415 220% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 10.2958057395 136% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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