TPO-25 - Integrated Writing Task In 1938 an archaeologist in Iraq acquired a set of clay jars that had been excavated two years earlier by villagers constructing a railroad line. The vessel was about 2,200 years old. Each clay jay contained a copper cylin

The article states that vessels, that have been discovered in Iraq, were unlikely to use as electricity batteries and provides three reasons of support. However, the professor states that the battery explanation could be very well correct, and she refutes each of the author’s reasons.

First, the reading claims that if this vessels were truly used as batteries, we should have been found at the excavated location evidences of electric conductors, such as metal wires. Conversely, the professor explains that the absence of wires have happened because people who were responsible for excavation are locals and not experts in archaeology field. Therefore, they could have been found evidences of electric  conductors, but they did not recognized them, or materials might have been thrown away.

Second, the article avers that since the copper cylinders look exactly to what discovered in the Seleucia city, these cylinders were used for holding scrolls of sacred texts. The professor, on the other hand, refutes this point by saying the copper cylinders were true are look alike than in Seleucia location, but this does not prove anything. She explains that people could had discovered another use for these cylinders later. they learned that a combination of Iron and some liquid in the vessel clay, they will produce produce an electricity. The professor concludes that cooper was first originated for a specific purpose, after that it could adopted for something else, like producing electricity.

Third, the reading avers that even if ancient people could generated electricity, they had no device to relied on electricity. The professor opposes this point by saying the use of electricity could be for producing mild shock. Since people could have been able to generate an invisible power, such as electricity, they could convince others that they have magical powers.
Moreover, the professor mentions that the vessels that generated electricity could have been used for healing purposes, as muscle stimulus. Also, the vessels could be used for relief aches, or pain. So, could ancient doctors may have used these batteries.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...sels, that have been discovered in Iraq, were unlikely to use as electricity batt...
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...unlikely to use as electricity batteries and provides three reasons of support. H...
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...es that the battery explanation could be very well correct, and she refutes each ...
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.... First, the reading claims that if this vessels were truly used as batteries, w...
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...s metal wires. Conversely, the professor explains that the absence of wires have ...
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...ld have been found evidences of electric  conductors, but they did not recognized ...
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Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'recognize'
Suggestion: recognize
... electric  conductors, but they did not recognized them, or materials might have been thro...
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...nything. She explains that people could had discovered another use for these cylind...
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... another use for these cylinders later. they learned that a combination of Iron and ...
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...me liquid in the vessel clay, they will produce produce an electricity. The professor concludes...
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Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'adopt'
Suggestion: adopt
...a specific purpose, after that it could adopted for something else, like producing elec...
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Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'generate'
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...avers that even if ancient people could generated electricity, they had no device to reli...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, third, well, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.4613686534 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 5.04856512141 297% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 22.412803532 147% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1813.0 1373.03311258 132% => OK
No of words: 336.0 270.72406181 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39583333333 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76395494258 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 145.348785872 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529761904762 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 419.366225166 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 3.25607064018 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.51434878587 330% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7535784638 49.2860985944 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.3125 110.228320801 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 21.698381199 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.875 7.06452816374 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 4.19205298013 286% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.520077004858 0.272083759551 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.173263853491 0.0996497079465 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707778655387 0.0662205650399 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.282813646237 0.162205337803 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0621220327322 0.0443174109184 140% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.3589403974 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 53.8541721854 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.0289183223 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.2367328918 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 63.6247240618 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.7273730684 144% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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