TPO-25 - Integrated Writing Task In 1938 an archaeologist in Iraq acquired a set of clay jars that had been excavated two years earlier by villagers constructing a railroad line. The vessel was about 2,200 years old. Each clay jay contained a copper cylin

According to the reading passage, non-expert people in Iraq found a set of ancient clay jars when they had been work on the railroad construction in 1936. Each jars contained a copper cylinder with iron cover so, the archaeologist guessed, jars may be used as an electric batteries.
Although the reading passage opposes to this claim but, the professor has some reasons in favour of ancient jars. The reasons described in following.

First, The reading passage claims if the jars had been used as the batteries,their wires should have found in the vicinity of the jars. But the professor say the excavetors were non-expert and they probably thought the wires had not value.

Second, reading passage describe that the similar copper cylinders had found in other ancient places which they had been held the scrolls of the sacred texts. However the professor confirmed the similar excavations but, he think the ancient people found that these cylinders can be used as electricity generators through the time.

At last, eventhough the reading passage claims that the ancient people had not any devises worked with electricity but, the professor say they may be use them as medicene or magic power.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 156, Rule ID: EACH_EVERY_NNS[1]
Message: 'Each' and 'every' are used with singular. Did you mean 'all'?
Suggestion: All
...k on the railroad construction in 1936. Each jars contained a copper cylinder with i...
^^^^
Line 1, column 273, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'batterie', 'battery'?
Suggestion: batterie; battery
...uessed, jars may be used as an electric batteries. Although the reading passage opposes...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 77, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , their
... the jars had been used as the batteries,their wires should have found in the vicinity...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 234, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'valued'.
Suggestion: valued
...they probably thought the wires had not value. Second, reading passage describe th...
^^^^^
Line 6, column 160, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...n held the scrolls of the sacred texts. However the professor confirmed the similar exc...
^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 224, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'thinks'.
Suggestion: thinks
...nfirmed the similar excavations but, he think the ancient people found that these cyl...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 12.0772626932 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 22.412803532 54% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 30.3222958057 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1008.0 1373.03311258 73% => OK
No of words: 197.0 270.72406181 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11675126904 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 4.04702891845 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59694161441 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 145.348785872 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548223350254 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 296.1 419.366225166 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4761370916 49.2860985944 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 110.228320801 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8888888889 21.698381199 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44444444444 7.06452816374 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338264256425 0.272083759551 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141285034774 0.0996497079465 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0777916267473 0.0662205650399 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186838686777 0.162205337803 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0979499956416 0.0443174109184 221% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.3589403974 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 63.6247240618 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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