TPO 28 - Integrated Writing Task

The reading and lecture both discuss if the peary reached the North Pole or not. While the reading provides three claims to support the idea that Peary reached the North Pole, the professor refutes, saying none of these claims are convincing.

Firstly, the reading avers that the National Geographic Society committee agreed that Peary reached the North pole after their investigation. However, the professor argues this notion by saying that the National Geographic committee declared that Peary indeed reached the Pole, but this is not completely objective. Moreover, this committee had his friends. So, they got money to support this trip. Furthermore, the committee was just for two days which is not enough time to evaluate this trip carefully. As a result, this committee is not trustful.

Secondly, the article mentions that there are many new expedition that support that Peary reached the Pole in 37 days as Avery who made the same trip in less than 37 days with the same tools. On the other hand, the professor questions this point by explaining that Tom's trip is completely different. For instance, Avery had less wight through his trip. This is because he had not food with him, the food dropped off from the plane. Also, he had a highly good condition. So, Avery's trip is different than Peary's trip.

Finally, the article states that the photographs that taken by Peary avers that the sun's position in that photo is the same sun's position at the Pole. So, the photo had been taken when Peary was there. Nevertheless, the professor contradicts this idea by pointing out that this measuring is not accurate. Furthermore, this measures depend on shadow that was not precise. the photo was so fugue and faded. So, it is so hard to calculate the sun's position.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 76, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s if the peary reached the North Pole or not. While the reading provides three cl...
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Line 5, column 500, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...condition. So, Averys trip is different than Pearys trip. Finally, the article st...
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Line 7, column 323, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uring is not accurate. Furthermore, this measures depend on shadow that was not p...
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Line 7, column 374, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...depend on shadow that was not precise. the photo was so fugue and faded. So, it is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 12.0772626932 149% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 22.412803532 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 22.0 30.3222958057 73% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1479.0 1373.03311258 108% => OK
No of words: 299.0 270.72406181 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94648829431 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46675414423 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498327759197 0.540411800872 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 440.1 419.366225166 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 21.2450331126 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.7105622579 49.2860985944 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.95 110.228320801 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.95 21.698381199 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.95 7.06452816374 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.442749908414 0.272083759551 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127341935934 0.0996497079465 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105717125902 0.0662205650399 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.27561788078 0.162205337803 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0618000627552 0.0443174109184 139% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 13.3589403974 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 53.8541721854 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.0289183223 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 12.2367328918 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.498013245 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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