Computer games are considered one of the most important aspects in children lives. Recently, there are many advanced technology available at the marker. Mnay children can get aware by everything around them through video games. I am sure that many people believe that allowing children to play computer games is a great idea. While, others would disagree. However, when it comes to me I totally agree that children have to get in touch with computer games for a long time. I feel this way for two important reasons which, I will demonstrate in the following essay.
To begin with, playing computer games can help children improve their skills. Nowadays, we are living in a very dynamic world and huge advanced technology. Playing games can introduce children to the world. For instance, my husband gave my little daughter a lap top at her fifth birthday. In fact, my daughter started to explore the laptop. In addition, she tried to download new gamed online and started to teach herself how to play it. Moreover, she was looking for new application to help her to understand the game instructions. For example, she was playing candy crush game and she tried to compete with other people online. Furthermore, during the game she would able to learn how to use the computer functions and how to install new games. besides, she learned how to search on line a bout tremendous information. On the other hand, if I did not let her use her laptop to play computer game, she could not improve her computer skills. As you can see the computer games can enable our children to learn new capabilities.
In addition, computer games relive children stress. Many students are struggling with many assignments and exams. Also, they have a lot of academic courses and they feel frustrated all year long. For example, my cousin is at third grade and he has a lot of paper work to do at school. In addition, his father has to study with him couple of hours every day but he allowed him to play computer games for two hours daily. So, he would able to feel energized and he would able to communicate with other friends online. Consequently, he started to focus at the class room and he became totally motivated. Nevertheless, my sister in law could not have chance to play on her tablet. This is because their parents thought that it will affect her grades negatively. As a result, she became disappointed and she felt so sad. Furthermore, she got a very bad score by the end of the year. This experience taught me that computer games can help children to relieve their stress.
In sum, I totally convinced that we should allow children to play computer games with other friends. This is because computer games can encourage children to absorb new skills, and because computer games relieve their stress. So, we have to support them with a new advanced tools to practice computer games.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...to play computer games is a great idea. While, others would disagree. However, when i...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Besides
...functions and how to install new games. besides, she learned how to search on line a bo...
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... could not improve her computer skills. As you can see the computer games can enab...
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: sister-in-law
...ame totally motivated. Nevertheless, my sister in law could not have chance to play on her ta...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'tool'?
Suggestion: tool
...ave to support them with a new advanced tools to practice computer games.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, nevertheless, so, third, while, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in fact, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2380.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76953907816 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54525270496 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476953907816 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 735.3 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 24.0 9.59856630824 250% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.6003584229 165% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.5319649912 48.9658058833 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 70.0 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6764705882 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38235294118 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274626186241 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0753483836844 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0752932886539 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199670798371 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.054674829135 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.79 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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