TPO-28 - Integrated Writing Task Robert E. Peary was a well-known adventurer and arctic explorer who in 1909 set out to reach the North Pole. When he returned from the expedition, he claimed to have reached the pole on April 7, 1909. This report made him

The author of the reading passage and the professor both discuss whether or not Robert E. Peary did reach the North Pole on April 7. 1909. The author explains three theories to prove this idea. However, the professor thinks that the author's reasons contain some defects.

First of all, the author claims that the committee of the National Geographic Society investigated the Peary's records and equipment, and declared that Peary did reach the North Pole. However, the professor indicates that the committee's membership is Peary's friend, and the committee contributed the funding to support the Peary's trip. And according to Peary himself, the investigation only last for 2 days, the investigators didn't look it through.

In addition, the author states that Tom Avery who is a British explorer used the same equipment as Peary had and took the same way like Peary did. Avery accomplished this tour less than 37 days, and he proved that Peary didn't tell a lie. On the contrary, the professor asserts that Avery had much less weight than Peary did. Moreover, the weather condition was totally different. When Avery traveled to the North Pole, his weather was more favorable than Peary when he did the same trek.

Finally, the author raises the point that according to the photos, the shadows showed that the sun's position was exactly in the North Pole. On the other hand, the professor contends that the photos were taken 100 years ago, the images were already blurred and faded away. The photos can't detect correctly sun's positions whether were same in the North Pole.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 66, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... passage and the professor both discuss whether or not Robert E. Peary did reach the North Pol...
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Line 3, column 226, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'committees'' or 'committee's'?
Suggestion: committees'; committee's
...wever, the professor indicates that the committees membership is Pearys friend, and the co...
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Line 3, column 426, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...only last for 2 days, the investigators didnt look it through. In addition, the a...
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Line 5, column 221, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... than 37 days, and he proved that Peary didnt tell a lie. On the contrary, the profes...
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Line 7, column 284, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...eady blurred and faded away. The photos cant detect correctly suns positions whether...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, look, moreover, so, as to, in addition, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 30.3222958057 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1313.0 1373.03311258 96% => OK
No of words: 263.0 270.72406181 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99239543726 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.365190169 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 145.348785872 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54752851711 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 387.9 419.366225166 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.23620309051 182% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.0194253617 49.2860985944 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.5333333333 110.228320801 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5333333333 21.698381199 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.13333333333 7.06452816374 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.476794970151 0.272083759551 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.167457097877 0.0996497079465 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143288138034 0.0662205650399 216% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.272118678304 0.162205337803 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103288080994 0.0443174109184 233% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.3589403974 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 63.6247240618 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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