TPO-28 - Integrated Writing Task Robert E. Peary was a well-known adventurer and arctic explorer who in 1909 set out to reach the North Pole. When he returned from the expedition, he claimed to have reached the pole on April 7, 1909. This report made him

In this reading, it claims that peary did reach North Pole with three strong reasons, however, this lecture contends that no solid evidence has supported the assertion in the following reasons.

First of all, the position of the committee is not objective because it has contributed money to support their trip which cause that their data is not accurate and may make fake examinations.In the contrary, the committee in this reading insists that Peary’s accounts is consistent and persuasive ,so this may cast our doubt about its authenticity.

In addition, the reading points out that Avery covered the same distance with the same equipment as in Peary’s trip while this lecture refutes that Avery carried much less weight in his trip because he do not need so much food and drop them along the way. In this explanation, their speeds are different , so it can not provide convincing conclusion .

What’s more, the reading argues that the record of surf in the photograph is the same as what was in the North Pole in Peary’s time. Nevertheless, the lecture posits that according to an accurate investigation, the technology in that time was fussy ,so the photograph could have blurred or faded so that it is unable to estimate the result accurately.

In conclusion, the reading and the lecture hold the opposite views in Peary’s claim. The lecture reputes its reality in three points such as the objectivity of the committee and the authenticity of Avery’ speed and the technology.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...accurate and may make fake examinations.In the contrary, the committee in this rea...
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...much less weight in his trip because he do not need so much food and drop them alo...
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...of the committee and the authenticity of Avery' speed and the technology.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, then, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1274.0 1373.03311258 93% => OK
No of words: 248.0 270.72406181 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13709677419 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96837696647 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.896718143 2.5805825403 112% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560483870968 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 387.9 419.366225166 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 21.2450331126 146% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.1172928758 49.2860985944 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.25 110.228320801 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0 21.698381199 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.75 7.06452816374 195% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300137417965 0.272083759551 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127206075405 0.0996497079465 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0828161034547 0.0662205650399 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164091684952 0.162205337803 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0691798173937 0.0443174109184 156% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.3589403974 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 53.8541721854 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.0289183223 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.42419426049 108% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 63.6247240618 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.7273730684 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.498013245 137% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.2008830022 161% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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