tpo 30
In this set of material, the reading passage claims that Greek military used a weapon that was called "burning mirror “in fact a polished copper surface curved. It was focusing on Romans' ships and causing to catch fire, however the reading argues this had been a myth and then it brings up three reasons to support its idea. On the other hand the lecture finds all ideas dubious and provides some evidence to advocate that these reasons are not convincing, in fact the information the professor provides contradicts the fact outlined in the reading passage.
First, the reading passage proposes that Greek did not have such a technology for creating this device. It had to build from a large sheet of copper to have a precise ability parabolic curvature that did not exist in the ancient world. In contrast the professor declares that for having a mirror with parabolic curvature had not been needed to very large sheet, in fact Greek military used a large number of small individual sheet coppers that it was more effective.
Second, the author of readings contends that an experiment revealed that focusing the mirror on wooden ships to burn, take a long time and during this time, ship has to be steady without moving, conversely the professor believes that it is true about wood, however there were a lot of other materials on the ship for burning faster, like "Pech". Romans' ship had such a thing that it could catch fire in a few seconds, even if ship was moving.
Third, The Greek had another weapon was called flaming arrow that its function was approximately as burning mirror, so they did not need to build another weapon, on the contrary the lecture argues that Romans were familiar with this advice, so using it could have not been affect for a long time, and also when they were using from burning mirrors, soldiers of Roman could just see mirror, and suddenly they were facing with a huge massive of fire.
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Essay evaluation report
focusing the mirror on wooden ships to burn, take a long time
focusing the mirror on wooden ships to burn takes a long time
Romans' ship had such a thing that it could catch fire in a few seconds
Romans' ship had such a thing that could catch fire in a few seconds
The Greek had another weapon was called flaming arrow
The Greek had another weapon which was called flaming arrow
The Greek had another weapon called flaming arrow
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Words: 335 250
Write the essay in 20 minutes.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 12
No. of Words: 335 250
No. of Characters: 1550 1200
No. of Different Words: 166 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.278 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.627 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.226 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 41 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 17 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 37.222 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.048 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.889 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.411 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.411 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 216, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'catching'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: catching
...as focusing on Romans ships and causing to catch fire, however the reading argues this h...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 239, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: contrast,
... did not exist in the ancient world. In contrast the professor declares that for having ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 390, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...arge sheet, in fact Greek military used a large number of small individual sheet coppers that it ...
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Line 4, column 274, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...advice, so using it could have not been affect for a long time, and also when they were us...
^^^^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'conversely', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'third', 'as to', 'in contrast', 'in fact', 'it is true', 'on the contrary', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.242666666667 0.261695866417 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.197333333333 0.158904122519 124% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0746666666667 0.0723426182421 103% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0506666666667 0.0435111971325 116% => OK
Pronouns: 0.032 0.0277247811725 115% => OK
Prepositions: 0.125333333333 0.128828473217 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0586666666667 0.0370669169778 158% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.42073908617 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.024 0.0208969081088 115% => OK
Particles: 0.00266666666667 0.00154638098197 172% => OK
Determiners: 0.114666666667 0.128158765124 89% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.008 0.0158828679856 50% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.008 0.0114777025283 70% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1941.0 1645.83664459 118% => OK
No of words: 335.0 271.125827815 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.79402985075 6.08160592843 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.04852973271 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.340298507463 0.374372842146 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.253731343284 0.287516216867 88% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.140298507463 0.187439937562 75% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0597014925373 0.113142543107 53% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42073908617 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 145.348785872 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513432835821 0.539623497131 95% => OK
Word variations: 53.5629822902 53.8517498576 99% => OK
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0529801325 69% => OK
Sentence length: 37.2222222222 21.7502111507 171% => OK
Sentence length SD: 112.460473166 49.3711431718 228% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 215.666666667 132.220823453 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.2222222222 21.7502111507 171% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.66666666667 0.878197800319 190% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.39072847682 118% => OK
Readability: 62.5953565506 50.5018328374 124% => OK
Elegance: 1.52380952381 1.90840788429 80% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.631857802816 0.549887131256 115% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.162855133562 0.142949733639 114% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0842963570786 0.0787303798458 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.6784451466 0.631733273073 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.18269826475 0.139662658121 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.30791587113 0.266732575781 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107493546384 0.103435571967 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.301068311732 0.414875509568 73% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0518133344798 0.0530846634433 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.434632438201 0.40443939384 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0290709005392 0.0528353158467 55% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.26048565121 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 3.0 3.49668874172 86% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.62251655629 110% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 3.1766004415 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 7.0 10.2958057395 68% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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