TPO-30 - Integrated Writing Task A little over 2,200 years ago, the Roman navy attacked the Greek port city of Syracuse. According to some ancient historians, the Greeks defended themselves with an ingenious weapon called a "burning mirror": a polished co

The reading demonstrates some evidences which do not support usage of Greek's weapon called a burning mirror. The professor in the lecture, however, believes that these evidences are not valuable. These evidences are mainly in three aspects.

First, even though the reading explains that the knowledge of ancient Greeks did not improve enough to build that weapon, the professor argues that they made mirrors of a single sheet with small size. So that was not very sophisticated and Greeks had the potential to made.

Moreover, contrary to the statement of reading that burning mirror need a long time to send fire toward the ship. The professor contends that the claim of the reading is true just about wood but if those weapons were made of other sticky materials, this process takes few seconds even ship moving.

Finally, the reading states that burning mirror is very similar to flaming arrows so Greeks did not need to burning mirror as a new weapon. Nevertheless, the professor in the lecture proves that ships obviously saw flaming arrows but about burning mirror, they could see the mirror and by this way, burning mirror was very surprising and effective because ships were not able to detect them correctly.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 403, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...were not able to detect them correctly.
^^

Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'nevertheless', 'second', 'so']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.234513274336 0.261695866417 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.185840707965 0.158904122519 117% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0752212389381 0.0723426182421 104% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0884955752212 0.0435111971325 203% => Less adverbs wanted.
Pronouns: 0.0132743362832 0.0277247811725 48% => OK
Prepositions: 0.115044247788 0.128828473217 89% => OK
Participles: 0.0442477876106 0.0370669169778 119% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.43229064027 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0309734513274 0.0208969081088 148% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.12389380531 0.128158765124 97% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00442477876106 0.0158828679856 28% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00442477876106 0.0114777025283 39% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1232.0 1645.83664459 75% => OK
No of words: 203.0 271.125827815 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.06896551724 6.08160592843 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77462671648 4.04852973271 93% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.394088669951 0.374372842146 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.28078817734 0.287516216867 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.142857142857 0.187439937562 76% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.103448275862 0.113142543107 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43229064027 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 145.348785872 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.581280788177 0.539623497131 108% => OK
Word variations: 54.6486707398 53.8517498576 101% => OK
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0529801325 69% => OK
Sentence length: 22.5555555556 21.7502111507 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.6268915071 49.3711431718 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.888888889 132.220823453 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5555555556 21.7502111507 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.878197800319 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.39072847682 29% => OK
Readability: 50.6343732895 50.5018328374 100% => OK
Elegance: 1.36923076923 1.90840788429 72% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.608242577141 0.549887131256 111% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.175383540425 0.142949733639 123% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.115670475393 0.0787303798458 147% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.707861416716 0.631733273073 112% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.124602294957 0.139662658121 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.307431733107 0.266732575781 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.133340751519 0.103435571967 129% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.312985795378 0.414875509568 75% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0579203055177 0.0530846634433 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.409593513982 0.40443939384 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0953983198467 0.0528353158467 181% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.26048565121 23% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 1.0 3.49668874172 29% => More positive topic words wanted.
Negative topic words: 6.0 3.62251655629 166% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 3.1766004415 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 7.0 10.2958057395 68% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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