TPO-32 - Integrated Writing Task Starting in the 1960s and continuing until the 1980s, sailors in Russian submarines patrolling the North Alantic and Arctic Ocean would occasionally hear strange sounds. These underwater noises reminded the submarine crews

In this set of material, the passage and the lecture provide two opposing points of view about the origin of some sounds called "quackers" which were heard by sailors in Russian submarines many years ago. While the passage provides three feasible resources of the sound, the lecture denies to accept them as plausible facts. She states that even these days, the origin of those sounds is still unknown.
First, the passage declares that the sounds were actually the calls of male and female orca wales during a counters ritual. The speaker refutes this remark by pointing out the fact that these whales are inhabitant near the surface of the ocean but the sounds were heard deep in the ocean. In addition to this, if the whales were the source of the noise, they should have been detected by the submarines' sonar.
Second, the passage asserts that the sounds might be caused by giant suid due to the fact that they live deep in the ocean and they are hard to detect by the sonar, this idea is strongly supported. On the other hand, the lecture states that although it is possible to consider these giants as the origin of the sounds. Nevertheless, according to the fact that the sounds have been disappeared despite the existence of this creatures, this cannot consider as a convincing idea. In addition, these creatures had been there before the sounds were heard by the sailors.
Finally, the author claims that these sounds could be generated from a foreign submarine. In contradict to this, the speaker argues that based on the observation, those sounds moved around and changed direction so fast that even these days technology cannot lead to construct a submarine which can move around and change the direction that fast and she concludes that is not possible.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 294, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'denies accepting'.
Suggestion: denies accepting
...ble resources of the sound, the lecture denies to accept them as plausible facts. She states tha...
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Line 2, column 392, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'submarines'' or 'submarine's'?
Suggestion: submarines'; submarine's
..., they should have been detected by the submarines sonar. Second, the passage asserts tha...
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Line 3, column 418, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...en disappeared despite the existence of this creatures, this cannot consider as a co...
^^^^
Line 4, column 235, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'days'' or 'day's'?
Suggestion: days'; day's
...anged direction so fast that even these days technology cannot lead to construct a s...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, if, nevertheless, second, so, still, while, in addition, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 22.412803532 152% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 30.3222958057 135% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1477.0 1373.03311258 108% => OK
No of words: 303.0 270.72406181 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87458745875 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46802025192 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524752475248 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 419.366225166 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.2423346899 49.2860985944 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.083333333 110.228320801 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.25 21.698381199 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 7.06452816374 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367722509617 0.272083759551 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139333650588 0.0996497079465 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0809146976082 0.0662205650399 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227537084356 0.162205337803 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0920480971399 0.0443174109184 208% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.3589403974 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 63.6247240618 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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