tpo 34
The reading gives some hypotheses that lead to sea cows in the Berian Island to extinct. However, the lecture refutes all the hypotheses provided in the reading passage.
First, the professor mentions that the sea cows were massive creature and big in size. Since the native Siberian were small population at that time, a couple of sea cows could feed the native Siberian for a month. Therefore, native Siberian are in not in need for overhunting sea cows for food. That was a point where the lecture disagree with the point illustrated in the reading passage.
Second, contrary to belief in the reading that the ecosystem disturbances, accompanied by the decline of sea cows main source of food the kelp, is the main reason for the sea cows extinct, the lecture refutes the hypothesis by saying that ecosystem disturbance should effect other sea mammals like whales. However, there is no evidence that other sea mammals were effected at that period. That was another point where the lecture refutes what mentions in the reading material
Finally, The author mentions that European fur traders are responsible for sea cows extinction as three are recored that indicates that the fur trader cought the last sea cow in 1968.In contrast, the professor emphasizes that that the europpean fur traders were not responsible for sea cows extinction. Evidence indicates that sea cows population were at high level in the past and started to decline before the European traders arrive to Bering Island. Therefore, there must be anther factor that lead to their decline rather than the fur traders.
Overall, it seems that the lecture showed that there are discrepancies in the points illustrated in the reading passage.
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Sentence: That was a point where the lecture disagree with the point illustrated in the reading passage.
Description: The fragment lecture disagree with is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace disagree with verb, past participle
the ecosystem disturbances, accompanied by the decline of sea cows main source of food the kelp, is the main reason for the sea cows extinct
Description: what is the subject for 'is'? can you re-write this sentence?
as three are recored that indicates that
as three are records that indicate that
Sentence: Finally, The author mentions that European fur traders are responsible for sea cows extinction as three are recored that indicates that the fur trader cought the last sea cow in 1968.In contrast, the professor emphasizes that that the europpean fur traders were not responsible for sea cows extinction.
Description: The fragment that that contains a repeated word
Suggestion: Delete a possible duplicate word:
Sentence: Therefore, native Siberian are in not in need for overhunting sea cows for food.
Error: overhunting Suggestion: overhanging
Sentence: Finally, The author mentions that European fur traders are responsible for sea cows extinction as three are recored that indicates that the fur trader cought the last sea cow in 1968.In contrast, the professor emphasizes that that the europpean fur traders were not responsible for sea cows extinction.
Error: cought Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: europpean Suggestion: european
Error: recored Suggestion: record
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
better to have 4 paragraphs:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 13 12
No. of Words: 283 250
No. of Characters: 1398 1200
No. of Different Words: 128 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.102 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.94 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.452 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 79 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.769 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.342 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.538 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.411 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.653 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.098 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 4