In the set of the material ,both the reading and the professor discusses the advantages of the smart cars. the reding states that, soon technology will provide smart cars, that virtually drive themselves. And there are three advantages of such cars. Conversely the professor says that, even computrized cars have expected some benifits but are not clear. And he refutes each claim in the reading.
First of all, the reading claims that, smart cars will prevent many accidents, thereby saving lives. But the professor says that, it stills accidental if the technique advances which allow smart cars tightly pack and involve many cars so it's worse than today. Overall little reason to believe that there will be decrease saving life is and in the number of injuries.
Second , the reading states that, the wide use of smart cars, traffic problems will practically disappear. However the professor says that, there is no effect on increasing high way speeds and decrease commuting time. In history when some drivers felt convenient when they drove cars , many people decided to drive cars. In future there is no decreasing in commuting time becaue traffic caused by additional cars will not let the driver with smart cars to take it's advantage.
Third, the reading says that, smart cars will bring a reduction in the costs of driving. But the professor says that, smart cars will need extra expensive to do sensors which lets the driver knows how far his car stay behind the that front of him, furthermore repairing these cars need extra money than the traditional mechanical cars, so their expensive will be exceed the expectation saving.
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it stills accidental if the technique advances which allow smart cars tightly pack and involve many cars so it's worse than today.
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to take it's advantage.
to take its advantage.
will need extra expensive
will need extra expense
Sentence: But the professor says that, smart cars will need extra expensive to do sensors which lets the driver knows how far his car stay behind the that front of him, furthermore repairing these cars need extra money than the traditional mechanical cars, so their expensive will be exceed the expectation saving.
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Sentence: In the set of the material ,both the reading and the professor discusses the advantages of the smart cars. the reding states that, soon technology will provide smart cars, that virtually drive themselves.
Error: reding Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Conversely the professor says that, even computrized cars have expected some benifits but are not clear.
Error: benifits Suggestion: benefits
Error: computrized Suggestion: computerized
Sentence: In future there is no decreasing in commuting time becaue traffic caused by additional cars will not let the driver with smart cars to take it's advantage.
Error: becaue Suggestion: because
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