TPO 36 Integrated Writing
Hail—pieces of ice that form and fall from clouds instead of snow or rain—has always been a problem for farmers in some areas of the United States. Hail pellets can fall with great force and destroy crops in the field. Over the last few decades, a method of reducing hail, called "cloud seeding," has been tried. In cloud seeding, the chemical silver iodide is sprayed on storm clouds from an airplane This makes the clouds produce harmless rain or snow instead of hail. Several pieces of evidence suggest that cloud seeding has been effective in protecting crops from hail.
The reading and the lecture are both about the effectiveness of "cloud seeding" to prevent hail. The author of the reading feels
that cloud seeding's use of chemical silver effectively reduces or stops hails. The lecturer challenges the calim made by the
author. She is of the opinion that the reasonings in support of the author's claim are faulty.
To begin with, the author argues that laboratory tests results are in favor of cloud seeding success. The article mentions that
cold water, when added with silver iodide, becomes harmless light snow. This specific argument is challenged by the lecturer.
She points out that these result will just be produced in the laboratory but not in real natural conditions. Additionally, she states
the silver iodide actually reduces not only ice but also water and snow. It results in drought that harms the growth of plants and
crops.
Secondly, the writer suggests that the results in Asia help understand the effectiveness of cloud seeding. In the article, it is
stated that cloud seeding is productive in controling precipitation in city areas of Asia. The lecturer, however, refutes this by
mentioning city pollution plays a vital role in cloud seeding's success in Asia, so the USA will not be affected by the procedure
much. She elaborates on this by bringing up the point that most of USA's crops are grown in urban areas where pollutions are
limited.
Finally, the author posits that lecal studies also suggest that cloud seeding will be successful. Moreover, in the article it is
demonstrated that a farming region faced less damage after using cloud seeding. In contrast, the lecturer's position is that those
good results were produced by nature itself. She notes that, the surrounding areas of east, south, and north, where cloud seeding
was not used, also faced less damage on that particular time. So cloud seeding doesn't produced the success, instead nature did.
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- Summarise the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they case doubt on specific points made in the reading passage. 3
- Summarise the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they cast doubt on specific points made in the reading passage. 3
- TPO 36 Integrated WritingHail—pieces of ice that form and fall from clouds instead of snow or rain—has always been a problem for farmers in some areas of the United States. Hail pellets can fall with great force and destroy crops in the field. Over th 3
- TOEFL integrated writing: Chevalier de Seingalt 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: That
...hail. The author of the reading feels that cloud seedings use of chemical silver e...
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Suggestion: Author
...urer challenges the calim made by the author. She is of the opinion that the reasoni...
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Suggestion: Cold
...ng success. The article mentions that cold water, when added with silver iodide, b...
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Suggestion: The
... conditions. Additionally, she states the silver iodide actually reduces not only...
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Suggestion: Crops
...t that harms the growth of plants and crops. Secondly, the writer suggests that t...
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Suggestion: Stated
... cloud seeding. In the article, it is stated that cloud seeding is productive in con...
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Suggestion: Much
...will not be affected by the procedure much. She elaborates on this by bringing up ...
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Suggestion: Limited
...n in urban areas where pollutions are limited. Finally, the author posits that leca...
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Suggestion: Demonstrated
...ssful. Moreover, in the article it is demonstrated that a farming region faced less damage...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Good
... the lecturers position is that those good results were produced by nature itself....
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Suggestion: Was
...south, and north, where cloud seeding was not used, also faced less damage on tha...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... that particular time. So cloud seeding doesnt produced the success, instead nature di...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, in contrast, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 12.0772626932 149% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 30.3222958057 135% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1653.0 1373.03311258 120% => OK
No of words: 317.0 270.72406181 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21451104101 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57673292909 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 145.348785872 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555205047319 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 419.366225166 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 3.25607064018 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.4391715227 49.2860985944 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.0 110.228320801 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6842105263 21.698381199 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 7.06452816374 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 15.0 4.09492273731 366% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 4.19205298013 286% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0856007571016 0.272083759551 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0278583849838 0.0996497079465 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0221515164691 0.0662205650399 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0320733705418 0.162205337803 20% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0161465672585 0.0443174109184 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.3589403974 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.42419426049 108% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 63.6247240618 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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