TPO 40
In the reading section, the writer contends that because of the extreme and inhospitable conditions on Venus, it is not possible to maintain a permanent presence there because the atmospheric pressure of Venus' surface is much greater than earth, the are no reservoirs of water on Venus' surface, and very little sunlight reaches the planet surface; however, in the lecture, the professor casts doubt on the reading points by presenting some reasons and examples.
First of all, the writer claims that due to its high atmospheric pressure which applies 100 kilograms on every square centimeter of surface nothing can land on Venus and anything would be crushed by landing on its surface. Conversely, the professor rejects this notion by suggesting that by putting a floating station in Venus' atmosphere we can deal with these challenges easily; furthermore, he states that it is a well-known fact that pressure at 50 kilometers above the Venus' surface is equal to earth surface. Thus, spacecrafts and humans can easily handle that amount of pressure.
Moreover, contrary to the idea in the reading part suggesting that there are no reservoirs of water on Venus' surface and its atmosphere, and the fact that it is impractical to supply water and oxygen from earth, the lecturer mentions that as we know there is carbon dioxide and sulfuric acid in Venus's atmosphere. Hence, by using chemical reactions we can turn them into oxygen and water, so there is no need to supply them from earth.
In addition, even though the writer asserts that very little sunlight reaches the Venus' surface due to the thick clouds that fill the Venus's atmosphere, so the lack of enough sunlight would prevent the use of solar power cells, the professor denotes that clouds above the Venus's atmosphere which the floating spacecraft located are not so dense. Therefore, we have access to enough sunlight to use in our solar power cells.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 247, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...nus surface is much greater than earth, the are no reservoirs of water on Venus surface...
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Line 2, column 452, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'kilometer' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'kilometers'.
Suggestion: kilometers
...s a well-known fact that pressure at 50 kilometer above the Venus surface is equal to ear...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 513, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...enus surface is equal to earth surface. Thus spacecrafts and humans can easily handl...
^^^^
Line 3, column 68, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are no reservoirs'?
Suggestion: there are no reservoirs
...dea in the reading part suggesting that there is no reservoirs of water on Venus surface and its atmos...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, first, furthermore, hence, however, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1593.0 1373.03311258 116% => OK
No of words: 318.0 270.72406181 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00943396226 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59109001741 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 145.348785872 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512578616352 0.540411800872 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 494.1 419.366225166 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 21.2450331126 184% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 131.024270175 49.2860985944 266% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 199.125 110.228320801 181% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.75 21.698381199 183% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.75 7.06452816374 195% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.516734016092 0.272083759551 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.194747628904 0.0996497079465 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.081116261647 0.0662205650399 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.281842552259 0.162205337803 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.031870622541 0.0443174109184 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.0 13.3589403974 165% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.89 53.8541721854 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.5 11.0289183223 168% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.37 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.42419426049 110% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 63.6247240618 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 10.7273730684 256% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 17.6 10.498013245 168% => OK
text_standard: 28.0 11.2008830022 250% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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