TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the

In view of the reading, the author says that so harmful is the glass on the building for birds and there are some solutions which has been noted on the article. Finding the statements arguable, the lecturer casts doubt on the solutions made by the article and presents peice of evidence in contrary.

At first, the author argues that there are kind of glass which caled one-way glass and it will be beneficial in this situation. Using this glass, not only can it provide a good view for people in the building, but it can help the birds to consider it as an solid obstacle since they can not see in the building. Conversely, the lecturer brings up the idea that this one-way glass act like mirror and bird see the back of themselves through it and they can not understand the difference. So, this solution is not practical.

In addition, the reading passage holds the view that colorful design can be used as a helpful solution. As a matter of fact, by using thin stripes, people can see out easily and birds prevent themselves to fly through the glass. On the other hand, the lecturer disputes this claim by clarifying the fact that if we want to get result from this solution, we should have a little unpainted area of the glass since without that, it is impossible to birds can see them.

Finally, the author asserts using powerful electromagnets as the last point for supporting a solution to prevent bird's hurt. The lecturer, though, dismisses it by pointing out the fact that bird's sence about earth's magnetic field is related to the far distance. So, it cannot help them in this short distance which they have with the glass. Therefore, it is useless to use electromagnets in building.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 255, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...it can help the birds to consider it as an solid obstacle since they can not see i...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, finally, first, if, so, therefore, in addition, kind of, as a matter of fact, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 22.412803532 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 30.3222958057 139% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1404.0 1373.03311258 102% => OK
No of words: 300.0 270.72406181 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68 5.08290768461 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4910952522 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 145.348785872 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523333333333 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 415.8 419.366225166 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5513187177 49.2860985944 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.0 110.228320801 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0769230769 21.698381199 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.61538461538 7.06452816374 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.47008627406 0.272083759551 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160060503077 0.0996497079465 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0887040634834 0.0662205650399 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273879241132 0.162205337803 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0890703857766 0.0443174109184 201% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 53.8541721854 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 12.2367328918 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 63.6247240618 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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