TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the

Glass is one of the most well-known materials in modern archtecture. Using glasses is dangerous for birds. Because, birds can't distinguish between glass and sky. Birds will fly right into the glass and this would cause injuries. The reading passage proposes some ways to prevent these injuries. But the lecturer thinks these methods can't stop injuries in birds.
The reading passage thinks that architectures can use one way glass to protect birds. Because, birds can't see inside the building and they will understand that the glass is a solid barrier. But the lecturer thinks that one way glass will reflect sky like mirror and birds won't understand this and they will fly right into the mirror.
The reading passage proposes colorful painting as a second method. Because birds would see paints and strips and avoid fly through the glass. But the lecturer thinks that birds will see paints as an open hole and will try to fly through them. To avoid this problem, architectures must design small glassess which is not possible. Because it makes buildings so dark.
Finally, the reading passage thinks that an artificial magnetic field can guide birds away from buildings. Because birds use magnetic field for navigating in their trips. But the lecturer thinks that birds use magnetic field for navigating in long distance travelling. Birds will use eyes and light for navigation in short distances.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 123, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... is dangerous for birds. Because, birds cant distinguish between glass and sky. Bird...
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Line 1, column 334, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
.... But the lecturer thinks these methods cant stop injuries in birds. The reading ...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e methods cant stop injuries in birds. The reading passage thinks that architec...
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Line 2, column 103, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... glass to protect birds. Because, birds cant see inside the building and they will u...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d they will fly right into the mirror. The reading passage proposes colorful pa...
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Line 3, column 332, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...n small glassess which is not possible. Because it makes buildings so dark. Finally,...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e. Because it makes buildings so dark. Finally, the reading passage thinks that...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, second, so, well, in short

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.4613686534 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 7.30242825607 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 30.3222958057 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1172.0 1373.03311258 85% => OK
No of words: 230.0 270.72406181 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09565217391 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89432290496 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38554246545 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 145.348785872 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491304347826 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 329.4 419.366225166 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 21.2450331126 56% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.6021314699 49.2860985944 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 65.1111111111 110.228320801 59% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.7777777778 21.698381199 59% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.44444444444 7.06452816374 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.27373068433 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.504627325685 0.272083759551 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.17600824107 0.0996497079465 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102241496427 0.0662205650399 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.321655867126 0.162205337803 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349942170606 0.0443174109184 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 13.3589403974 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.22 53.8541721854 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 11.0289183223 51% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 11.41 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.84 8.42419426049 81% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 63.6247240618 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.7273730684 42% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.498013245 65% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.2008830022 62% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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