TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the

Both the author of the reading and the speaker discuss solutions to prevent injuries birds from glass window. The speaker negates all the ideas has mentioned in the reading.
First of all, the author of the reading points out that people can use clear glass in only one direction in their buildings. That means people can see out, but birds cannot see in. This point is challenged by the speaker. He restates the fact that for birds, one -way glass is as bad as regular glass because they cannot recognize the reflection of mirrors. They may think that mirrors are the same real sky. Thus, they fly through them.
Secondly, the author of the reading contends that people can paint colorful lines or other designs on regular window glass, such as thin stripes. The speaker rebuts this argument by saying that if people paint big or regular stripes on window, birds will see glass as whole sky and fly through them. If people paint small stripes on window, it will make the space of buildings look extremely small.
Finally, the author of the reading states that people can create an artificial magnetic field to lead birds away from buildings. The speaker, on the other hand, opposes this point by explaining that birds only use magnetic field to travel long distance. When they travel short trip, they just use their eyes and sense to travel. Therefore, the artificial magnetic field cannot help them in this case.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, such as, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 10.4613686534 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1175.0 1373.03311258 86% => OK
No of words: 245.0 270.72406181 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79591836735 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.13643741963 2.5805825403 83% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 145.348785872 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542857142857 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 331.2 419.366225166 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.6381410036 49.2860985944 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.3333333333 110.228320801 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3333333333 21.698381199 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06452816374 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.498522413966 0.272083759551 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153035617494 0.0996497079465 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0944992180006 0.0662205650399 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.28383514667 0.162205337803 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0825243925511 0.0443174109184 186% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 13.3589403974 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 53.8541721854 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.0289183223 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 12.2367328918 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.01 8.42419426049 83% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 63.6247240618 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.7273730684 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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