TPO-44 - Integrated Writing Task In 1957 a European silver coin dating to the eleventh century was discovered at a Native American archaeological site in the state of Maine in the United States. Many people believed the coin had been originally brought to

Submitted by ahnaf on Tue, 06/05/2018 - 05:12

In the reading, the author states about the silver coin, which was brought to North America by European explorers, known as Norse, who visited Native Americans a thousand years ago. The writer provides three reasons that the coin is carried not original historical evidence and supports each reason. However, the professor states that the coin is not fake and opposes each of the author's reasons.

First of all, there is the longest distance from Norse Settlements, which suggests that the coin has no relation with the settlement. On the other hand, the lecturer refutes that there was not the only coin available also many objects were found in Maine. There was historical explanation for it. Native American was interested to collect the objects from far places. There might be a possibility that they visited Norse site and brought back the coin.

Second, the author claims that in Canada, there is no coin available where Norse lived. Conversely, the speaker says that Norse had no permanent settlement in Canada. She mentions that Norse went to back to Europe. So when he went to Europe, he packed a lot of precious materials alone with the coin.

Finally, the writer posits that Norse thought that the silver coin could be useless for Native Americans. Although the silver coin could have extensive use in Europe, Norse knew that native North Americans could not realize the coin like money. However, the professor opposes this points by saying that it is true that native American didn't know the value of a coin like today. She says that Norse might see that they were interested in beautiful objects. For example, this coin could be used to make, etc. Therefore, she says that when native American understood that coins would be valuable, Norse started to trade with them.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 336, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ng that it is true that native American didnt know the value of a coin like today. Sh...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, finally, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, for example, first of all, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 23.0 12.0772626932 190% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1493.0 1373.03311258 109% => OK
No of words: 300.0 270.72406181 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97666666667 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30761781931 2.5805825403 89% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 419.366225166 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.4937396671 49.2860985944 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.9444444444 110.228320801 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6666666667 21.698381199 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06452816374 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.540027537985 0.272083759551 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.169588245748 0.0996497079465 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0855442482363 0.0662205650399 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.321791343417 0.162205337803 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.065369979256 0.0443174109184 148% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.3589403974 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 53.8541721854 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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The writer provides three reasons that the coin is carried not original historical evidence and supports each reason.
Description: can you rewrite this sentence? can't carry evidence.

There was historical explanation for it.
There was a historical explanation for it.

went to back to Europe
went back to Europe

this coin could be used to make, etc
this coin could be used to make sth., etc

flaws:
No. of Words: 301 250
Write the essay in 20 minutes. make the statement from listening shorter. This is too long:

Finally, the writer posits that Norse thought that the silver coin could be useless for Native Americans. Although the silver coin could have extensive use in Europe, Norse knew that native North Americans could not realize the coin like money.

this is wordy:
She mentions that Norse went to back to Europe. So when he went to Europe, ...

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 17 12
No. of Words: 301 250
No. of Characters: 1444 1200
No. of Different Words: 153 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.165 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.797 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.227 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 68 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 42 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.706 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.533 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.529 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.356 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.548 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.17 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4

please tell me how cold I write in short form this sentences.

Finally, the writer posits that Norse thought that the silver coin could be useless for Native Americans. Although the silver coin could have extensive use in Europe, Norse knew that native North Americans could not realize the coin like money.

Thank you