TPO-45 Integrated Writing Task

The reading passage and the lecture both are about the possibility of the existence of bees 200 million years ago. The reading passage believes that the fossil structures that resemble bee nests and found in Arizona State were not created by bees. The lecturer casts doubt on the reasons mentioned in the reading passage and she states that they are unconvincing.

Firstly, the reading passage states that there is no fossil of actual bees from 200 million years ago. The earliest fossil remains of bees are 100 million years old not 200 years old. This point of view is challenged by the lecturer. She says that the lack of fossil of bees is due to the lack of sticky materials in trees; because bees can just be preserved in this sticky material that did not create 200 million years ago in trees. Therefore, fossils of bees could not be preserved until now.

Secondly, the reading passage says that the flowering plants did not exist 200 million years ago. Hence, because of the biological relation between bees and the flowering plants, bees could not exist before the advent of the flowering plants. However, the lecturer argues that bees were feeding on the non-flowering plants during the evolutionary period. After the advent of flowering plants 125 million years ago, bees became adapted to the flowering plants and then have remained stable until now.

Finally, the reading passage claims that the fossilized structures found in Arizona lack some of finer details that suggest the fossilized structures were made by other insects. In contrast, the lecturer refutes this point. She believes that scientist analyze the fossils by chemical materials and they found that the materials exist in the fossils are the same as the sticky and waterproof materials that exist in the modern bee nests.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 249, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...Arizona State were not created by bees. The lecturer casts doubt on the reasons men...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, hence, however, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1508.0 1373.03311258 110% => OK
No of words: 301.0 270.72406181 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00996677741 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37283273874 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.428571428571 0.540411800872 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 445.5 419.366225166 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1585190989 49.2860985944 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.533333333 110.228320801 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0666666667 21.698381199 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.06666666667 7.06452816374 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0553823086065 0.272083759551 20% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0283228908057 0.0996497079465 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0204589305338 0.0662205650399 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0381031202286 0.162205337803 23% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0126207129047 0.0443174109184 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.42419426049 89% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 63.6247240618 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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