TPO-46 Integrated essay
In this set of materials, the reading claims that electronic medical records of patients have several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping. However, in the lecture, the professor casts doubt on what is presented in the text and refuses every of the reason given in the reading. She does not feel that the electronic medical records are as beneficial as the author assumes.
First of all, it it clearly stated in the reading that electronic medical record keeping will result in reduced costs. However, the professor disagrees with this idea. She explains from another angle that they probably not be saving any money related to paper records. They keep the paper records as emergency back up so still have to pay for the storage cost. Considering these aspects, it will neither benefit it terms of cost nor in terms of space.
Secondly, the author states that it will be very helpful for doctors to easily access the medical records and thus it will also reduce the chances of medical errors. The professor challenges the validity of this assertion. She suggests that they still can not eliminate the poor handwriting of the doctors as they have to use pen and papers while examing the patient. Later they will feed that data into the computer and the person who is feeding the data into the computer have to predict what is written.
Finally, the author mentions that it reduces chances of human errors. The professor,on the other hand, sates that access to all the records information is under the strict privacy rules in USA. So it is not easy to recollect data and such information can not be provided easily to anyone.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 15, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: it
...as the author assumes. First of all, it it clearly stated in the reading that elec...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , on
...s chances of human errors. The professor,on the other hand, sates that access to al...
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Line 7, column 133, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'records'' or 'record's'?
Suggestion: records'; record's
...ther hand, sates that access to all the records information is under the strict privacy...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, second, secondly, so, still, thus, while, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1371.0 1373.03311258 100% => OK
No of words: 280.0 270.72406181 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89642857143 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43852738683 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 145.348785872 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528571428571 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 419.366225166 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.5494171039 49.2860985944 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.4 110.228320801 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 21.698381199 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.93333333333 7.06452816374 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.447841402551 0.272083759551 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134609349161 0.0996497079465 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12464910166 0.0662205650399 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.267296955794 0.162205337803 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0927850533283 0.0443174109184 209% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.3589403974 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.2367328918 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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