TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which informa

Although the author argues three main advantages for storing the medical information of patients in electronic databases, the professor finds them dubious and brings up three reasons to refute them all.

Firstly, the author argues that it would increase the costs by saving money on producing paper and the costs of faxing, copying and, transporting paper records. On the other hand, the professor gainsays this idea and states that although some doctors utilize electronic medical records, they still make use of papers for emergency backup. In addition, in some occasions, patients need doctors' signature and legal forms to represent their information. Thus, they still require paper-based records.

Secondly, the author holds the view that using computer-based records would reduce human errors such as poor hand writing, however, using computer databases, they are less likely to make mistakes. In contrast, the professor asserts that some doctors take notes while they are examining their patients and then enter them into the computer and in this case, they are more likely to make mistakes since some words are not legible during entering the data.

Finally, the author takes the view that electronic medical records would be used for research since they are assembled in precise format. However, the professor states that it is not as easy as the author thinks, because in order to access to this database, researchers should have legal permissions which are really strict and unachievable. Moreover, they require the permission of patients and some of patients do not agree upon using their personal information to conduct a research.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 397, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the patients') or simply say ''some patients''.
Suggestion: some of the patients; some patients
... require the permission of patients and some of patients do not agree upon using their personal ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 476, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...g their personal information to conduct a research.
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, still, then, thus, while, in addition, in contrast, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1396.0 1373.03311258 102% => OK
No of words: 259.0 270.72406181 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38996138996 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5527455594 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 145.348785872 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555984555985 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 426.6 419.366225166 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.433654038 49.2860985944 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.6 110.228320801 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9 21.698381199 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.2 7.06452816374 215% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340426062556 0.272083759551 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132854615836 0.0996497079465 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617210276469 0.0662205650399 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198873338203 0.162205337803 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414448555042 0.0443174109184 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.3589403974 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 53.8541721854 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.0289183223 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.2367328918 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.42419426049 111% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 63.6247240618 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.7273730684 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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