TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which informa

The reading and the listening are both about the advantages and the disadvantages of the using the electronic medical information. The author in the reading thinks that there are three advantages of the using of the electronic medical data. On the other hand, the professor of the listening part contradicts that.

The tutor in the reading states that the use of the electronic medical record can save a lot of money.
He states that the patient record needs a lot of money in transporting faxing. The professor in the listening part defeats this point. He argues that The doctors who use the electronic record databases are unlikely to save money. He explains that the doctor still keeps his documents and the patient record in paper form .he keeps the chart for back up for different legal purposes, in addition to that it contains the original signature.H e elaborates also by saying that he still needs to pay for the paper storage.

Secondly, the reading claims another advantage of using the electronic record is reducing the medical errors. On the other hand, the speaker contradicts this claim. He states that the adoption of electronic records cannot decrease the human errors. He elaborates this idea by saying that, Doctors are still using pen and papers to write down their notes. Furthermore, also he manual write his prescription. He explains more when he says the staff is the one who interprets these note form paper form to electric from also subjects to human errors.
Finally, the reading argues that the adoption of the medical electronic records can also help the doctors in their researches, as they will have electronic access to any records. The listening totally disagrees with that point. He posits that so hard to access to any medical record of any patients especially here in the USA. The patient information is highly restricted, consequently, doctors could not access to any information. He states that it needs patient authorization and many permissions, in addition to that some patients blocked their records even their medical drugs which they use.

Inclusion, the reading, and the listening are both about the adoption of the medical information electronically.both contradict each other by providing their own point of view.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, in addition, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 22.412803532 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 30.3222958057 139% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 5.01324503311 219% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1903.0 1373.03311258 139% => OK
No of words: 372.0 270.72406181 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11559139785 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.04702891845 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77630134771 2.5805825403 108% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 145.348785872 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430107526882 0.540411800872 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 586.8 419.366225166 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 3.25607064018 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.5720028432 49.2860985944 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.15 110.228320801 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 21.698381199 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 7.06452816374 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.09492273731 147% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 4.45695364238 224% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.421057033397 0.272083759551 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145994066631 0.0996497079465 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111239401552 0.0662205650399 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234487536657 0.162205337803 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0990574886258 0.0443174109184 224% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.3589403974 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.42419426049 89% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 63.6247240618 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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