TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which informa

the reading and lecturer are both about storing patients medical record in United State, which is traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. The author of reading believes that its more beneficial storing patients medical record in electronics database. The lecturer casts doubt on claims made in the article. She thinks that the claims are actually very uncertain.
First of all, the author points out that electronic records can help to reduce the costs. It is mention that it can reduce the costs by saving money on faxing, copying, storing or transporting paper record from one location to another. This point is challenged by the lecturer. She says that there is no any saving by record storage, doctors who adopt electronic base record still use paper. Furthermore, she argues that doctors wont throughout the papers they keep for emergency backup as well as legal record.
Secondly, the author contends that chance of medical error can be reduce by electronic records. The article notes that electronic records are associated with standardization of form and legible computer font which reduce the human errors. The lecturer rebuts this argument. She suggests that using electronic records can not eliminate the possibility of errors by poor hand writing or patient transcript. She elaborates this by mentioning that doctors who adopt electronic records still use pen and paper to examine their patients.
Finally, the author stats that researchers can easily access to large amount of data from patient records with the help of electronic record. The article establishes that it is impossible and very expansive for the researcher to go through out thousands of patient’s paper records housed in doctor office while its very simple to draw out the data already available in patient database from any research locations. The lecturer, on the other hand, posits that researchers will not benefit with patient medical records. She puts forth the idea that it is very difficult to access patient records, it has very strict privacy laws in united stated and they can private their medical records or block it as per as privacy laws.
in conclusion, the lecturer casts doubt on all of the claims and theories present in the article.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: The
the reading and lecturer are both about sto...
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Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...by the lecturer. She says that there is no any saving by record storage, doctors w...
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Line 4, column 232, Rule ID: THROUGH_OUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'throughout'?
Suggestion: throughout
...very expansive for the researcher to go through out thousands of patient's paper recor...
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...ds or block it as per as privacy laws. in conclusion, the lecturer casts doubt on...
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
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...conclusion, the lecturer casts doubt on all of the claims and theories present in the arti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, in conclusion, as well as, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 12.0772626932 149% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 22.412803532 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 30.3222958057 155% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1897.0 1373.03311258 138% => OK
No of words: 366.0 270.72406181 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18306010929 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60418061897 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 145.348785872 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502732240437 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 584.1 419.366225166 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 3.25607064018 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.810125274 49.2860985944 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.8421052632 110.228320801 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2631578947 21.698381199 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78947368421 7.06452816374 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 4.45695364238 247% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.640569775239 0.272083759551 235% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.201800954599 0.0996497079465 203% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13827475724 0.0662205650399 209% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.340022834699 0.162205337803 210% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.172550963232 0.0443174109184 389% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.3589403974 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 63.6247240618 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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