TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which informa

Claim made in article is that storing medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping and mentions third profits. On contrast, the professor says that each of these benefits is uncertain and refutes each of author's advantages.

First, the text asserts that use of electronic data bases decreases the costs, because we do not need to allocate a huge space for storing paper records. On the contrary, the lecturer casts doubt on this matter by saying that keeping information as electronic data eliminate for devoting a large room for keeping records, while we still need to have paper records as a back up. In addition, doctors should be adapted with this service.

Second, the reading states that reduce the chances of medical errors because electronic records are associated with standardization of form and legible computer fonts. Conversely, professor rebuts this point by explaining that most doctors tend to take a note by hand, and later they will inputs notes in electronic databases. So, this plan can not decrease the medical errors, which has had serious consequences for the patients' health.

In third place, the passage expresses that having an electronic data bases allows researches to have convenient access medical information, which is impossible in paper-based records. In contrast, the point is challenged by the speaker when he says it would be difficult to have access with medical information. She states that privacy law does not allow researches to use medical information with out having several permissions. In addition, patients may block to have access their medical information by anyone.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 290, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'input'
Suggestion: input
...ake a note by hand, and later they will inputs notes in electronic databases. So, this...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 422, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'patients'' or 'patient's'?
Suggestion: patients'; patient's
...ch has had serious consequences for the patients health. In third place, the passage ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 394, Rule ID: WITH_OUT[1]
Message: This word is usually written together. Did you mean 'without'?
Suggestion: without
...w researches to use medical information with out having several permissions. In addition...
^^^^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'conversely', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'still', 'third', 'while', 'in addition', 'in contrast', 'on the contrary']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.278350515464 0.261695866417 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.175257731959 0.158904122519 110% => OK
Adjectives: 0.103092783505 0.0723426182421 143% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0240549828179 0.0435111971325 55% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0240549828179 0.0277247811725 87% => OK
Prepositions: 0.147766323024 0.128828473217 115% => OK
Participles: 0.0515463917526 0.0370669169778 139% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.79428406143 2.5805825403 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0240549828179 0.0208969081088 115% => OK
Particles: 0.00687285223368 0.00154638098197 444% => OK
Determiners: 0.0824742268041 0.128158765124 64% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0171821305842 0.0158828679856 108% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0103092783505 0.0114777025283 90% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1689.0 1645.83664459 103% => OK
No of words: 264.0 271.125827815 97% => OK
Chars per words: 6.39772727273 6.08160592843 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.04852973271 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.424242424242 0.374372842146 113% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.348484848485 0.287516216867 121% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.208333333333 0.187439937562 111% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.155303030303 0.113142543107 137% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79428406143 2.5805825403 108% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579545454545 0.539623497131 107% => OK
Word variations: 59.7392409245 53.8517498576 111% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0529801325 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.7502111507 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5363034975 49.3711431718 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.75 132.220823453 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 21.7502111507 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.08333333333 0.878197800319 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.39072847682 88% => OK
Readability: 56.8484848485 50.5018328374 113% => OK
Elegance: 2.13846153846 1.90840788429 112% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.673648675597 0.549887131256 123% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.103673297299 0.142949733639 73% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0703993278839 0.0787303798458 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.577429244886 0.631733273073 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.139165041794 0.139662658121 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.260773907812 0.266732575781 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10843154252 0.103435571967 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.235816072965 0.414875509568 57% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0411557624884 0.0530846634433 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.434587685116 0.40443939384 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0402405734558 0.0528353158467 76% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.26048565121 47% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 3.49668874172 143% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.62251655629 83% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 3.1766004415 31% => OK
Total topic words: 9.0 10.2958057395 87% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.