TPO-49 - Integrated Writing Task

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TPO-49 - Integrated Writing Task

Submitted by fatimamsy on Thu, 03/07/2019 - 13:04

The lecture and the reading both discuss sending a human to Mars. While the reading states this project needs to solve several problems, the lecture refutes each of the author's reason.

First of all, the reading claims a round-trip to Mars would take at least two years, therefore they need a large amount of water, food, and oxygen which need to the unlimited vehicle to bring these to Mars. Moreover, the lecture argues that scientist can use the hydroponic technology that can grow plants on the water instead of the soil. On the other hand, they can recycle the polluted water to produce fresh water. Furthermore, the professor says the plants can absorb carbon dioxide and produce oxygen.

In addition, the reading makes the arguments that the zero-gravity environment plays a negative effect on the human body. The lecture counters the point by stating that there are a lot of astronauts that spent much time on Mars with the zero-gravity environment without a problem, albeit they did some regular exercises. According to the professor, they use a kind of calcium that increases the bones density of the human body.

Ultimately, the reading passage argues that the level of space radiation emitted by the Sun is dangerous for the human. The lecture refutes this claim by pointing out the space radiation will not dangerous for the group because the Sun occasionally emitted the space radiation. Moreover, the professor says to avoid this dangerous level of space radiation group need to the special instrument to measure the level of the space radiation, also they can use the small shelter.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 396, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'bones'' or 'bone's'?
Suggestion: bones'; bone's
...se a kind of calcium that increases the bones density of the human body. Ultimatel...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, moreover, so, therefore, while, at least, in addition, kind of, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 10.4613686534 19% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1341.0 1373.03311258 98% => OK
No of words: 267.0 270.72406181 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02247191011 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52022914402 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524344569288 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 413.1 419.366225166 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6946386352 49.2860985944 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.75 110.228320801 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 21.698381199 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0833333333 7.06452816374 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114835013745 0.272083759551 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0435221510126 0.0996497079465 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0261339776148 0.0662205650399 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0617650268126 0.162205337803 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0282876359363 0.0443174109184 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.2367328918 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 63.6247240618 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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