Reading and lecture discusses about ability of hump back whales to navigate with stars in search of food and finding mate to far distance. Reading
suggests that humpback whales possess distinct trait of migrating through
stars, while lecture thinks that reasons explained in reading are
not logical.
First, reading argues that these whales have higher cognitive and sensory level to use
stars to direct themselves . In contrast, professor
thinks that there is no connection between intelligence and ability to use stars for direction. He further refutes this by providing example of duck, he says that duck naturally accquired feature of using star for direction and it nothing to do with higher cognitive level as ducks do not possess high intellectual level. Second, reading claims that humpback whales travel in straight lines, that can happen only
by using any external landmarks. However, lecture refutes this statment in of the article.
He says that, migration in straight lines occurs due to capability of these whales to orient
themselves to the earth's magnetic field. Furthermore, he adds that brain of this whale contain
chemical called magnetide which is sensitive to earth's magnetic field that makes orientation possible.
Finally, reading states that these whales float up and down that is spy hoping in the ocean to see the stars to guide
for traveling long distance. In contrary, lecture states that this spy hoping is rare among animals but
common among non-migrating species such as shark in search of prey. Furthermore, he says that whale perform this
activity at day time, where there are hardly any stars in the sky. As as result, professor successfuly refutes the points made in lecture.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 114, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... level to use stars to direct themselves . In contrast, professor thinks that ther...
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Line 2, column 461, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...do not possess high intellectual level. Second, reading claims that humpback wha...
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Line 3, column 402, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: As
... there are hardly any stars in the sky. As as result, professor successfuly refutes t...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, however, second, so, while, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1473.0 1373.03311258 107% => OK
No of words: 264.0 270.72406181 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57954545455 5.08290768461 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20018244407 2.5805825403 124% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598484848485 0.540411800872 111% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 419.366225166 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.23620309051 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.56235931 49.2860985944 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.75 110.228320801 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 21.698381199 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 7.06452816374 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322167847426 0.272083759551 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120038385882 0.0996497079465 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494550761064 0.0662205650399 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210151596072 0.162205337803 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0365659331088 0.0443174109184 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.3589403974 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 53.8541721854 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.0289183223 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 12.2367328918 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.42419426049 111% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 63.6247240618 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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