Independent essay
Future is unpredictable nobody knows what is going to happen next. Natural calamities such as cyclone, hurricane, earth quake are not uncommon these days. So it's is prudent to save some money for future.
Critics argue that it is better to travel some places when you are young. Activities such as Roller coasters, adventurous trips to mountains, para glide fascinate myriad number of people. According to them, Old people wish to participate but they can't, as multiple diseases such as cardiovascular diseases, psychological disorders or wear and tear in weight bearing are refrain from participating in sky diving and arduous activities. Elderly utilized their youth in blood, sweat and tears in accumulating wealth for old age, inspite of having exhorbitant money; they are not able to satisfy his curiosity. However, this is not the case, many healthy old population can participate in challenging activities due to improvement in health system. In fact, I read an article in newspaper suggesting that number of diseases are plummeting due to awareness among elderly to prevent deadly diseases. Regular exercise program, screening and balance diets are predominant factor in adding years to life. As a result, argument that restriction of privilege in old people is false.
On the other hand, it wise to save money for emergency conditions. For instance, on of my friend suffered from multiple fractures from road side accident. He ended up in emergency ward and had to stay in hospital for few days to recover. Unfortunately, he had to pay exhorbitant hospital bill in installments as he was not having enough money to pay bill. So this incident teaches that it is logical to spare certain amount of wealth for critical situation, rest of wealth can be exploited to satisfy curiosity. Similarly, senescence invites many deadly diseases, so to endure treatment expenses saving some is inevitable. For instance, my grandfather was diagnosed with hernia when he was seventy five years old, he was able to get treatment promptly because he had habit of saving 25% of what he earned every month. That money turned out to be his life saver. Therefore it is beneficial to preserve wealth for health.
In a nutshell, considering advantages of both side of prompt, it is worth saying that advantages of saving some money for future outweighs benefits of using all resources just after earning.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
... prudent to save some money for future. Critics argue that it is better to trave...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...Old people wish to participate but they cant, as multiple diseases such as cardiovas...
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Suggestion: skydiving
...aring are refrain from participating in sky diving and arduous activities. Elderly utilize...
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...s a result, argument that restriction of privilege in old people is false. ...
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...n of privilege in old people is false. On the other hand, it wise to save mone...
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Message: Did you mean 'wises'?
Suggestion: wises
... On the other hand, it wise to save money for emergency conditions...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, similarly, so, therefore, for instance, in fact, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2011.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15641025641 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87310066467 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594871794872 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0695004884 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7619047619 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5714285714 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04761904762 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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